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TPO 23 independent Agree or disagree in today s world it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct v.2

TPO 23 independent Agree or disagree in today s world it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct v. 2
Today' s world is considered as a VUCA (volatile and complex) place where all the employees and knowledge workers must try as hard as they can to fulfill their companies' requirements. In this context, there are mutually exclusive idealizations regarding whether working quickly in order to finish the job is more acceptable or working more slowly with higher concentration. In my point of view, I am inclined to the latter idea in spite of the fact that the former has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs. The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that by focusing on what is going to be proposed, the reliability of one person will increase among their colleagues. As PMI (project management institute) claims: " engineers and workers always have to double check their reports before handing them over to their supervisors/ managers" . To put in into a more vivid picture, I was a project control engineer three years ago when I was undergoing mandatory military service in my city, Kerman. At first, I thought that working fast is the climax objective of every engineer; therefore, I always tried hard to report to my manager regardless of what I was going to share with him. As a result, all of my reports were full of mistakes, the charts were unsatisfying, and the headlined were mislead. My manager, Reza, asked me to have a meeting with him. In the meeting, he told me working more efficiently is more vital than finishing my tasks fast; in other words, he meant that the faster an individual works, the more they are prone to mistakes. Afterwards, I realized that handing over the tasks in the most effective way is the main goal of every job. The second and equally far-reaching rationalization to bear in mind is that this mindset will gradually affect the quality of the individuals' tasks positively. Provided that a worker concentrate on their tasks and omit their mistakes and flaws consciously, they will do the exact correct work unconsciously in the future. Researchers of RMIT, one of the best universities in Australia, conducted a survey of civil engineers among whom they disseminated a questionnaire. They realized that there is an indirect exponential relation between their mistakes and their amount of effort concentrating on their work. In other words, the more they concentrate, the better results they will obtain, and they do not need to focus consciously on what they do after a few years. Like Buffet who was consciously trading in stock market for 30 years and made so many mistakes, but afterwards, he has been doing his job in the best way unconsciously since he had made his mistakes before. In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned justifications into account, I concur that working more slowly is more momentous for workers. In that case, they will be considered as a reliable person among others since they always finish everything correctly. Besides, this mindset will help workers to do their tasks unconsciously and without thinking about what is wrong and what is right to do.
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(volatile and complex) place where all the employees and knowledge
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companies&
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mutually
exclusive idealizations regarding whether
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working
quickly
in order to finish the job is more acceptable or
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working
more
slowly
with higher concentration. In my point of view, I
am inclined
to the latter
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idea
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in spite of
the fact that the former has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will
be elaborated
by the most outstanding, solid proofs.

The
first
and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that by focusing on what is going to
be proposed
, the reliability of one person will increase among their colleagues. As PMI (project management institute) claims:
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engineers
and
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workers
always
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have to
double
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check
their reports
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before
handing them over to their supervisors/
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managers&quot
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To put in into a more vivid picture, I was a project control
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engineer
three years ago when I was undergoing mandatory military service in my city,
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Kerman
. At
first
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that
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working
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fast
is the climax objective of every
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engineer
;
therefore
, I always tried
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hard
to report to my manager regardless of what I was going to share with him.
As a result
, all of my reports were full of
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mistakes
, the charts were unsatisfying, and the headlined
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were
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mislead
. My manager, Reza, asked me to have a meeting with him. In the meeting, he
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told
me
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working
more
efficiently
is more vital than finishing my
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tasks
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fast
;
in other words
, he meant that the faster an individual works, the more they are prone to
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mistakes
. Afterwards, I realized that handing over the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tasks
in the most effective way is the main goal of every job.

The second and
equally
far-reaching rationalization to bear in mind is that this mindset will
gradually
affect the quality of the
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individuals&
#039;
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tasks
positively
. Provided that a
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worker
concentrate on their
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tasks
and omit their
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mistakes
and flaws
consciously
, they will do the exact correct work
unconsciously
in the future. Researchers of
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RMIT
, one of the best universities in Australia, conducted a survey of civil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
engineers
among whom they disseminated a questionnaire. They realized that there is an indirect exponential relation between their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistakes
and their amount of effort concentrating on their work.
In other words
, the more they concentrate, the better results they will obtain, and they do not need to focus
consciously
on what they do after a few years. Like Buffet who was
consciously
trading in stock market for 30 years and made
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
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many
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mistakes
,
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but
afterwards, he has been doing his job in the best way
unconsciously
since he had made his
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mistakes
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before
.

In conclusion
, taking all the aforementioned justifications into account, I concur that
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working
more
slowly
is more momentous for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workers
.
In that case
, they will
be considered
as a reliable person among others since they always finish everything
correctly
.
Besides
, this mindset will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
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workers
to do their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tasks
unconsciously
and without thinking about what is
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wrong
and what is right to do.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay TPO 23 independent Agree or disagree in today s world it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
536 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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