Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that limiting the speed of vehicles to increase road safety is necessary, whereas others think that there are other ways to do so. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that limiting the speed of vehicles to increase road safety is necessary, whereas others think that there are other ways to do so. v. 1
Modernization has opened a new horizon of establishment and problems. The threat to road safety is among the most lethal growing issue as the population of the world is increasing. Avoidance of over speeding is considered to be the most effective way of preventing road traffic accordingly while some people consider other methods to be more justified as an order to maintain safe driving. Before concluding, we need rationalizing both aspects in detail. To begin with, vehicles on road with contended speed are considered to be safe as the driver usually control well and can prevent unpleasant happenings. For instance, international surveys reveal that most often the cause of lethal accidents are usually caused by over speeding and generally, people lose their control over their vehicles. One can say that maintaining a limited speed of cars and other automobiles over the road can make people safe from brutal incidents and disfigurements. On contrary, strict implementation of certain traffic rules with personalization can improvise traffic more better than any other mean. In this context, I would like to put an example of Canada, road traffic accidents are at least rate in all states as inhabitants are forced to follow all road rules which include maintenance of signals, good car conditions, avoidance of overtaking. Therefore, eventual all traffic follows a smooth momentum as people get afraid of penalties which they can have on abating these rules. To conclude, I per down saying that protected traffic by implementing strict legislation with strong penalties will be a more enhancing way. Although, avoidance of over speeding should also be taken into account.
Modernization has opened a new horizon of establishment and problems. The threat to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
safety is among the most lethal growing issue as the population of the world is increasing. Avoidance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
speeding
is considered
to be the most effective way of preventing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
accordingly
while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
consider other methods to be more justified as an order to maintain safe driving.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Before
concluding, we need rationalizing both aspects in detail.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, vehicles on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
with contended speed
are considered
to be safe as the driver
usually
control well and can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
unpleasant happenings.
For instance
, international surveys reveal that most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
the cause of lethal accidents are
usually
caused by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
speeding and
generally
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
lose their control
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
their vehicles. One can say that maintaining a limited speed of cars and other automobiles
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
safe from brutal incidents and disfigurements.

On contrary, strict implementation of certain
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
with personalization can improvise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
Use only "better" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more better
than any other mean. In this context, I would like to put an example of Canada,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
accidents are at least rate in all states as inhabitants
are forced
to follow all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
which include maintenance of signals,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
car conditions, avoidance of overtaking.
Therefore
, eventual all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
follows a smooth momentum as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
afraid of penalties which they can have on abating these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
.

To conclude
, I per down saying that protected
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
by implementing strict legislation with strong penalties will be a more enhancing way.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, avoidance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
over
speeding should
also
be taken
into account.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that limiting the speed of vehicles to increase road safety is necessary, whereas others think that there are other ways to do so. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts