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Some people have great ambitions in life others don t Do you think ambition is important to succeed in life Is it a positive or a negative quality to have v.1

Some people have great ambitions in life others don t Do you think ambition is important to succeed in life Is it a positive or a negative quality to have v. 1
An increasing number of people from developing nations are making their first car purchases. The principle problem this causes is traffic congestion and the most viable solution is better public transport. The primary dilemma developing countries face when their citizens start to buy cars is traffic jams. This is because people’s wealth has grown faster than the infrastructure and this means that roads that were built for bikes or a limited number of cars are suddenly clogged with a line of vehicles during peak times. The result of this is people getting stuck in traffic for a prolonged period of time during rush hour and also pollution of the atmosphere while cars run idly. For example, most roads in Ho Chi Minh City were built to carry bikes only, but now there are up to 5, 000 new cars added to the streets a month and it now takes up to half an hour to travel one kilometre within the city centre. A solution to this problem is to build a sustainable public transport system. This could solve the problem by taking most people off the roads and onto either an underground train or a train that runs above the road. As traffic problems increase, most people will become frustrated and decide to either sell their car or only use it when absolutely necessary. This is why Ho Chi Minh City is currently building their first metro line and sky train, similar to Bangkok’s; and they are projected to reduce journey times by up to 50% when they are completed. In conclusion, the main problem with the rise in the number of motor vehicles in third world countries is the clogging of the roads, however, this can be addressed through modern public transport infrastructure.
An increasing number of
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people
from developing nations are making their
first
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car
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purchases
. The principle
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problem
this causes is
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traffic
congestion and the most viable solution is better public transport.

The primary dilemma
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developing countries
face when their citizens
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start
to
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buy
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cars
is
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traffic
jams. This is
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because
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people’s
wealth has grown faster than the infrastructure and this means that
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roads
that
were built
for bikes or a limited number of
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cars
are
suddenly
clogged with a line of vehicles during peak times. The result of this is
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people
getting stuck in
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traffic
for a prolonged period of time during rush hour and
also
pollution of the atmosphere while
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cars
run
idly
.
For example
, most
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roads
in Ho Chi Minh City
were built
to carry bikes
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only
,
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but
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now
there are up to 5, 000 new
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cars
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added
to the streets a month and it
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now
takes up to half an hour to travel one
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kilometre
within the city
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centre
.

A solution to this
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problem
is to build a sustainable public transport system. This could solve the
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problem
by taking most
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people
off the
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roads
and onto either an underground train or a train that runs above the
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road
. As
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traffic
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problems
increase, most
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people
will become frustrated and decide to either sell their
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car
or
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only
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use
it when
absolutely
necessary. This is why Ho Chi Minh City is
currently
building their
first
metro line and sky train, similar to Bangkok’s; and they
are projected
to
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reduce
journey times by up to 50% when they
are completed
.

In conclusion
, the main
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problem
with the rise in the number of motor vehicles in third world countries is the clogging of the
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roads
,
however
, this can
be addressed
through modern public transport infrastructure.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people have great ambitions in life others don t Do you think ambition is important to succeed in life Is it a positive or a negative quality to have v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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