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TPO-22: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

TPO-22: Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
In the contemporary society, teachers have become more and more influential to the students. This phenomenon arouses a hot debate over whether teachers should expose their social and political views known to students in the classroom. As far as I am concerned, teachers should not reveal their social or political views in front of students. First of all, students are at the important stage of forming their values and they should be exposed to the objective views about the society and politic, instead of being influenced by the subjective views from their teachers. It is undeniable that some positive views from the teachers may help the students to view the world positively, but what if the teachers hold an negative views about our society? Students are just not mature enough to make judgement on those views. Moreover, it may create conflicts in the classroom if the teachers express their social or political views, which are contradictary to the students' views. For example, the last presidential campaign of United States caused so much conflicts in the society because people support different parties were strongly against each other. If the students find out their teachers support the opposite party, their respect to the teachers may be discounted. Once this happens, not only conflicts will be created but also the students' academic performance may be affected. Last but not least, not to discuss personal social or political views in unsuitable occasions is also a way to show respect to the other people. Same idea applies on the teachers as to respect their students in the classroom. Admittedly, everyone has the right to express their views about the society, but under the proper occasion. For example, if the teachers are invited to give a speech about a social topic, they may be allowed to express their opinion. Or if the teachers are asked by a student to discuss a political event privately, there is no problem to talk neither. However, it is just not proper to discuss their personal views in front of the whole class, which are not related the academic subject at all. In summary, with the above stated reasons, I think teachers should not reveal their social or political views to the students in the classroom
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teachers
have become more and more influential to the
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students
. This phenomenon arouses a hot debate over whether
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teachers
should expose their
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social
and political
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views
known to
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students
in the classroom. As far as I
am concerned
,
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teachers
should not reveal their
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social
or political
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views
in front of students.

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,
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students
are at the
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values and
they should
be exposed
to the objective
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views
about the
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society
and politic,
instead
of
being influenced
by the subjective
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views
from their
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teachers
. It is undeniable that
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positive
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may
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the world
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negative
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views
about our
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society
?
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are
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just
not mature
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enough
to
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make
judgement on those views.

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, it may create conflicts in the classroom if the
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teachers
express their
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social
or political
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views
, which are
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contradictary
to the
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views
.
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, the last presidential campaign
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much
conflicts in the
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society
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because
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people
support
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different
parties were
strongly
against each other. If the
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students
find out their
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support the opposite party, their respect to the
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may
be discounted
. Once this happens, not
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conflicts will
be created
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also
the
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social
or political
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views
in unsuitable occasions is
also
a way to
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show
respect to the other
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. Same
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teachers
as to respect their
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in the classroom.
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views
about the
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society
,
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but
under the proper occasion.
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, if the
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teachers
are invited
to give a speech about a
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social
topic, they may be
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allowed
to express their opinion. Or if the
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teachers
are asked
by a
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student
to discuss a political
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event
privately
, there is no problem to talk neither.
However
, it is
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just
not proper to discuss their personal
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views
in front of the whole
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class
, which are not related the academic subject at all.

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think
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teachers
should not reveal their
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views
to the
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students
in the classroom
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO-22: Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
374 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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