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TPO-19: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.3

TPO-19: In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3
With the development of the society and technology, people have easier access to information than they used to be. In order to keep up with the latest events and be well-informed, I agree that a person must get information from many different news resources. First of all, nowadays different medias have different standpoints, people should read news from different resources to get information from different perspective, in order to understand the topic in a more comprehensive way. For example, during the last president election of United States, the news topics were all about scandals and personal attacks between the two candidates. By that time, different TV channels had completely different news based on their political standpoints, in which some of them supported one candidate and reported all the positive news about that candidate, while the other TV channels did the opposite. Therefore, if people only focus on one specific news resources, they will be influenced by those perspectives, which is not objective at all. Moreover, one single news resource normally does not cover significant range of information, because most of them only focus on their specialized areas. For example, entertainment magazine only cover the gossips of the stars while economic magazine only focus on the knowledge of business and financial areas. If we want to obtain a variety of knowledge and information about different aspects, we need to get information from many different news resources. Last but not least, even though access to a variety of news resources could make people become well-informed, it is also important for us to learn how to sort out the news resources and utilize them wisely. Only when we use the resources correctly, can we avoid being overwhelmed by the large amount of information we get everyday. In summary, getting information from many different news resources does make people become well-informed, as long as they utilize the news resources wisely
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different
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, nowadays
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different
medias have
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different
standpoints,
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people
should read
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news
from
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different
resources to
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get
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different
perspective, in order to understand the topic in a more comprehensive way.
For example
, during the last president election
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of United States
, the
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news
topics were all about scandals and personal attacks between the two candidates. By that time,
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different
TV channels had completely
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different
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news
based on their political standpoints, in which
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some
of them supported one candidate and reported all the
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positive
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news
about that candidate, while the other TV channels did the opposite.
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, if
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people
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only
focus on one specific
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news
resources, they will
be influenced
by those perspectives, which is not objective at all.

Moreover
, one single
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news
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resource
normally
does not cover significant range of
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information
,
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because
most of them
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only
focus on their specialized areas.
For example
, entertainment magazine
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only
cover the gossips of the stars while economic magazine
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only
focus on the knowledge of business and financial areas. If we want to obtain a variety of knowledge and
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information
about
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different
aspects, we need to
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different
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news
resources.

Last
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not least,
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resources could
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make
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people
become well-informed, it is
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resources and utilize them
wisely
.
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when we
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use
the resources
correctly
, can we avoid
being overwhelmed
by the large amount of
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information
we
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get
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
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In summary, getting
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from
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many
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different
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news
resources does
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make
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people
become well-informed, as long as they utilize the
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news
resources
wisely
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO-19: In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
315 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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