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the line charts compare how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a car from 200 to 2012 v.1

the line charts compare how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a car from 200 to 2012 v. 1
Yes, I definitely with this opinion. A woman can do the parenting far better than a man. Upbringing a toddler needs more patience and which is abundant in a woman naturally. To begin with, the word mother is synonymous with someone who feeds, cares, nurtures and protects. A mother will go to all extends to keep her young away from harms. This is true for all animals where the maternal instinct is believed to be hard-wired to the brain. Mothers, with a higher level of the hormone, oxytocin, during pregnancy, exhibit a stronger bonding between mother and child. Children reach out more to their mothers than to their fathers. It may be because the mother spends more time with the child. Women naturally show emotion while men keep their feelings to themselves. Many households have both parents working. Even though lady being a mother always finds moments to spend with her kids. Secondly, throughout the human history, woman mainly takes care of the offspring and do most of the work for the children and at the same time they will take care of their family too. On the contrary, men are mainly busy outside the home to earn the living for the whole family. So, the woman gets more time to spare with kids as well as for communication, which is a must for a good relationship. Nevertheless, it is not difficult to find abundant evidence for the fact that mothers are more dedicated to their children than fathers. For example, when married couples with children get divorced, chances are that the children stay with the mother, not the father, especially if they are young. Parenting is perhaps the greatest responsibility of our life, so mistakes and wrong decisions can ruin a family as well as the future of a child. To conclude, I believe, genetically mothers have better quality in taking care of their children. I do feel at times women tend to be a bit more patient and more tolerable than men, which is an essential factor for being a parent. As a working Mommy, I strongly agree and believes that a woman is always better for take caring children than a man. Women are better multitaskers than men.
Yes, I definitely with this opinion. A
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woman
can do the parenting far
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better
than a
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man
. Upbringing a toddler needs more patience and which is abundant in a
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woman
naturally
.

To
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begin
with, the word
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mother
is synonymous with someone who feeds,
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cares
, nurtures and protects. A
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mother
will go to all extends to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
her young away from harms. This is true for all animals where the maternal instinct
is believed
to be
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hard
-wired to the brain. Mothers, with a higher level of the hormone, oxytocin, during pregnancy, exhibit a stronger bonding between
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mother
and child.
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Children
reach out more to their mothers than to their fathers. It may be
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because
the
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mother
spends more
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time
with the child. Women
naturally
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show
emotion while
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men
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
their feelings to themselves.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
households have both parents working.
“Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Even though
lady being a
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mother
always finds moments to spend with her kids.

Secondly
, throughout the human history,
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woman
mainly
takes
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care
of the offspring and do most of the work for the
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children
and at the same
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time
they will take
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care
of their family too.
On the contrary
,
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men
are
mainly
busy outside the home to earn the living for the whole family.
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So
, the
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woman
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gets
more
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time
to spare with kids
as well
as for communication, which is a
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must
for a
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good
relationship.
Nevertheless
, it is not difficult to find abundant evidence for the fact that mothers are more dedicated to their
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children
than fathers.
For example
, when married couples with
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children
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get
divorced, chances are that the
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children
stay with the
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mother
, not the father,
especially
if they are young. Parenting is perhaps the greatest responsibility of our life,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
mistakes and
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wrong
decisions can ruin a family
as well
as the future of a child.

To conclude
, I believe,
genetically
mothers have
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better
quality in taking
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care
of their
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children
. I do feel at
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times
women tend to be a bit more patient and more tolerable than
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men
, which is an essential factor for being a parent. As a working
In some contexts, this is childish language. Consider alternatives.
Mommy
, I
strongly
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agree
and believes that a
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woman
is always
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better
for take caring
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children
than a
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man
. Women are
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better
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multitaskers
than
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men
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay the line charts compare how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a car from 200 to 2012 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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