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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It s easier for parents to raise children than 50 years ago Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.1

It s easier for parents to raise children than 50 years ago Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 1
It is often seen that universities provide the best education to their students. They also focused on physical health by offering them various sports facilities. Some people argue that sports are equally important and must have the same allocation of funds as libraries. However, others state that the main aptitude of the educational institution is to provide lofty education and must invest a handsome amount for the betterment of libraries. I agree to some extent that the role of the books is far more important than sports activities. It is very important to have a good physical education for students. It will not only improve their health, but also helped them in developing skills such as teamwork, handling pressure under tensed situations etc. Therefore, it is required by the universities to spend on this constituent. Furthermore, nowadays there is too much study pressure on students. To relax and energize such activities should be provided on a regular interval. The archives are an essential part of every educational institution. Large numbers of students rely on libraries to complete their assignments, research works and final projects. It shows that the existence of a library is incomplete without having the books in it. Thus, a huge amount should be invested in libraries to improve its books catalogue. Latest books, journals and other reference materials should be incorporated in libraries to facilitate its users. To sum up, I would like to say that spending time in libraries is more worthy and has lofty values than playing. Universities must upgrade their libraries following technological advancement without considering cost so that numerous benefits could be taken out.
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that universities provide the best education to their
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students
. They
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focused on physical health by offering them various sports facilities.
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people
argue that sports are
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have the same allocation of funds as libraries.
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, others state that the main aptitude of the educational institution is to provide lofty education and
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must
invest a handsome amount for the betterment of libraries. I
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agree
to
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some
extent that the role of the
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books
is far more
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important
than sports activities.

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very
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important
to have a
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good
physical education for
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students
. It will not
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only
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improve
their health,
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also
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helped
them in developing
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skills
such as teamwork, handling pressure under tensed situations etc.
Therefore
, it
is required
by the universities to spend on this constituent.
Furthermore
, nowadays there is too much study pressure on
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students
. To relax and energize such activities should
be provided
on a regular interval.

The archives are an essential part of every educational institution. Large numbers of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
rely on libraries to complete their assignments, research works and final projects. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that the existence of a library is incomplete without having the
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books
in it.
Thus
, a huge amount should
be invested
in libraries to
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improve
its
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books
Possible spelling mistake. 'catalogue' is British English.
catalogue
.
A determiner is probably missing here: "the Latest".
Latest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, journals and other reference materials should
be incorporated
in libraries to facilitate its users.

To sum up, I would like to say that spending time in libraries is more worthy and has lofty values than playing. Universities
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must
upgrade their libraries following technological advancement without considering cost
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that numerous benefits could
be taken
out.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It s easier for parents to raise children than 50 years ago Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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