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Tpo 16 Do you agree or disagree with the statement The best way to travel is in a group led by tour guide v.2

Tpo 16 The best way to travel is in a group led by tour guide v. 2
Traveling is one of the ways we enjoy our lives. It is thought by some people that traveling alone would be better than traveling in a group. This essay will discuss why in fact, people would enjoy more their trip if they are led by a tour guide. To begin with, traveling in a group would give people the peace of mind of being safe. When people are led by a tour guide, they would have the opportunity to be safer than if they are alone. For instance, people who go on a trip by themselves do not have the security and the protection of others that they would have had if they are in a group. That is why it is crucial to be surrounded by other people, which could give you that protection. Secondly, people who travel in a group led by a tour guide would have more fun and learn more about the history of the place that they are visiting. It is significantly important that people learn something new and interesting about the new places because that would make the trip more memorable. My personal example is a compelling example of this. Ten years ago, I went to Paris by myself because I wanted to see all the amazing buildings and know more about the history of the city. It turned out that instead of focusing on learning something that I never heard before about the history of those buildings. I was worried because I had to find the correct directions that would bring me to those places that I wanted to see. I spent my time figuring out were the places were rather than enjoying and taking out the most of its history. Because of this, I did not have enough fun, I was worried all the time. Overall, people who travel in a group, they would have the opportunity to focus more on learning new interesting things without having any kind worries. To conclude, I agree with the statement that the best way to travel is in a group that has a planned guidance. This is mainly due to the fact that people would have more fun, learn more, and feel safe during their trip.
Traveling is one of the ways we enjoy our
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lives
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thought
by
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some
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people
that traveling alone would be better than traveling in a
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group
. This essay will discuss why in fact,
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people
would enjoy more their
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trip
if they
are led
by a tour guide.

To
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begin
with, traveling in a
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group
would give
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people
the peace of mind of being safe. When
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people
are led
by a tour guide, they would have the opportunity to be safer than if they are alone.
For instance
,
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people
who go on a
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trip
by themselves do not have the security and the protection of others that they would have had if they are in a
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group
.
That is
why it is crucial to
be surrounded
by other
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people
, which could give you that protection.

Secondly
,
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people
who travel in a
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group
led by a tour guide would have more fun and learn more about the
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history
of the
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place
that they are visiting. It is
significantly
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important
that
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people
learn something new and interesting about the new
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places
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because
that would
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make
the
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trip
more memorable. My personal example is a compelling example of this. Ten years ago, I went to Paris by myself
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because
I wanted to
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see
all the amazing buildings and know more about the
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history
of the city. It turned out that
instead
of focusing on learning something that I never heard
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before
about the
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history
of those buildings. I
was worried
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because
I had to find the correct directions that would bring me to those
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places
that I wanted to
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see
. I spent my time figuring out were the
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places
were
rather
than enjoying and taking out the most of its
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history
.
Because of this
, I did not have
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enough
fun, I
was worried
all the time.
Overall
,
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people
who travel in a
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group
, they would have the opportunity to focus more on learning new interesting things without having any kind worries.

To conclude
, I
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agree
with the statement that the best way to travel is in a
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group
that has a planned guidance. This is
mainly
due to the fact that
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people
would have more fun, learn more, and feel safe during their
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trip
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Tpo 16 The best way to travel is in a group led by tour guide v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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