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Most people prefer to eat ready meals rather than home made food these days. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v.2

Most people prefer to eat ready meals rather than home made food these days. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 2
In current decade, our lifestyle is very fast and its changing as per years progress. Years ago, people wish to consume only homemade food. Nowadays, to reach workplace itself, people are facing challenges such as traffic. In this essay, I would be discussing with advantages of having ready made food and disadvantages of not consuming home made food. Firstly, people does not have enough time to accommodate existing lifestyle of preparing home made food. In other words, with growing population, People mindset moved towards processed foods as it' s available always at best prices that people can afford. With the advent of mobile apps like zomato, dine-in, People need not travel to Restaurants also. Instead, they can order the foods right from their home desk and it' s delivered at low delivery cost. Another advantage is they can always concentrate on work or exercise or other leisure activities for extended hours than spending their time on cooking. Additionally, there are reviews available on crowdsourcing websites, so people need not worry on hygiene or quality of food. Hence, people blindly order their favourite packed food or restaurant lunch boxes from their office and they consume with their friends. In contrast, people are also welcoming to new diseases that are unknown in past like colon cancer, liver cancer. Hence this poses definitely biggest disadvantage of consuming ready to eat foods. People also unknowingly consume foods heavily without taking into consideration about the side effects. With home prepared food, its cooked with care and hygiene, hence there could be no side effects. If oily item is planned in the morning, later for lunch, heavy foods are not prepared. Additional care is taken at home in order to reduce major health issues. Infact, there are no health issues reported in homemade food. So, health issues are second disadvantage of eating ready to eat/processed foods. On the negative side, Processed foods have artificial flavor to enrich the taste before expiration date. Also, another advantage is that they have vegetable fats that could make people obese and it would impact for their lifetime. Certainly, any food that is frozen, canned, baked, preserved poses major threats to health. Ofcourse, it has lots of preservatives, color, sodium, sweetener which are dangerous to heart and stomach. Although, preservatives are added to preserve taste, freshness and appeal, they don' t serve any healthy purpose to our body. Especially, the snack foods offered in Movie theaters and malls have relatively high range of oil content, so it would be increasing fat and make us more obese or fatter. In conclusion, I agree that disadvantages of consuming ready to eat foods outweigh the advantages. Summing up, Health issues, obesity, irregular diet practice are the results of consuming ready to eat foods. Hence, I agree not to consume ready to eat foods and prefer only homemade foods which is healthy and has no side effects.
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fast
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its
changing as per years progress. Years ago,
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people
wish to
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consume
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only
homemade
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food
. Nowadays, to reach workplace itself,
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people
are facing challenges such as traffic. In this essay, I would be discussing with
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advantages
of having
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ready made
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food
and disadvantages of not consuming home made food.

Firstly
,
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people
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does
not have
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enough
time to accommodate existing lifestyle of preparing home made
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food
.
In other words
, with growing population,
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People
mindset
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moved
towards processed
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foods
as
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it&
#039; s available always at best prices that
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people
can afford. With the advent of mobile apps like
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zomato
, dine-in,
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People
need not travel to Restaurants
also
.
Instead
, they can order the
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foods
right from their home desk and
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it&
#039; s delivered at low delivery cost. Another
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advantage
is they can always concentrate on work or exercise or other leisure activities for extended hours than spending their time on cooking.
Additionally
, there are reviews available on crowdsourcing websites,
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so
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people
need not worry on hygiene or quality of
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food
.
Hence
,
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people
blindly
order their
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favourite
packed
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food
or restaurant lunch boxes from their
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office and
they
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consume
with their friends.

In contrast
,
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people
are
also
welcoming to new diseases that are unknown in past like colon cancer, liver cancer.
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this poses definitely
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biggest
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disadvantage
of consuming
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ready
to
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eat
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foods
.
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People
also
unknowingly
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consume
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foods
heavily
without taking into consideration about the side effects. With home prepared
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food
, its cooked with care and hygiene,
hence
there could be no side effects. If oily item
is planned
in the morning, later for lunch, heavy
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foods
are not prepared.

Additional care
is taken
at home in order to
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reduce
major
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health
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issues
.
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Infact
, there are no
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health
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issues
reported in homemade
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food
.
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,
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health
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issues
are second
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disadvantage
of eating
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ready
to eat/processed foods.

On the
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side, Processed
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foods
have artificial flavor to enrich the taste
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before
expiration date.
Also
, another
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advantage
is that they have vegetable fats that could
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make
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people
obese and it would impact for their lifetime.
Certainly
, any
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food
that
is frozen
, canned, baked, preserved poses major threats to
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health
.
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Ofcourse
, it has lots of preservatives, color, sodium, sweetener which are
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dangerous
to heart and stomach. Although, preservatives are
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added
to preserve taste, freshness and appeal, they
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don&
#039; t serve any healthy purpose to our body.
Especially
, the snack
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foods
offered in Movie theaters and malls have
relatively
high range of oil content,
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so
it would be increasing
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fat
and
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make
us more obese or fatter.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that disadvantages of consuming
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ready
to
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eat
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foods
outweigh the
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advantages
. Summing up,
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Health
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issues
, obesity, irregular diet practice are the results of consuming
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ready
to
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eat
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foods
.
Hence
, I
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agree
not to
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consume
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ready
to
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eat
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foods
and prefer
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only
homemade
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foods
which is healthy and has no side effects.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
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IELTS essay Most people prefer to eat ready meals rather than home made food these days. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
482 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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