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TPO 16 – taks 2: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is to travel in a group led by a tour guide. v.2

TPO 16 – taks 2: The best way to travel is to travel in a group led by a tour guide. v. 2
Traveling is one of the most popular hobbies in the world. Recreation, having new experiences, and making new friends could be some the reason why people travel. With the advent of new technologies, people travel in distinct ways. Some agree that the best way is to travel with an organized tour group; some others, however, disagree. From my perspective, I agree that traveling with a group led by a tour guide is the best way to travel and here are my justifications. Traveling with an organized tour group is very convenient. When I travel with a tour group, I don' t need to think about the problems that might occur during my travel. For example, last year I traveled to Turkey using my car and I stayed there for a week. Since I was working very hard for several months, my primary goal in that travel was to relax myself and enjoy visiting a new place for the first time. Unfortunately, I did not enjoy as much as I thought due to some vital problems. I did not know the language and regulations of the new place, so I had hard time communicating with people and obviating my needs. Hence, I had to figure out a way to make myself understood and it was very arduous. I wondered if I had traveled with a tour group, I did not have to encounter with such issues. Taking pleasure would be my only concern. Hence, traveling with a tour group is the best. Traveling with an organized tour group is efficient. Since I am new to the environment, I don' t know the interesting places I should visit. Therefore, I have to spend a significant amount of time searching on the internet or on a map or ask others for guidance. The previous example can be considered here to exemplify too. In my travel to Turkey, I spent a substantial amount of time asking from the people in the street where should I visit or how can I go to this address. That was troublesome and time consuming and could not afford to visit so many place. On the contrary, if I travel with a tour group, the tour guide already knows the places and addresses; consequently, I don' t have to worry about that anymore. Traveling with an organized group is more fun. Since the tour guide has comprehensive information about the place, he or she can exactly plan beforehand to leverage my time. In this way, I can make sure that I will visit tourism attractions and nice places. The tour guide will take care of everything and try his or her best to manage things in a way that I can enjoy more. Therefore, I can just sit down comfortably and enjoy my travel. In summary, travel with a tour group is certainly more fun. All in all, although some sophisticated people may prove the otherwise, I reiterate that the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour group. Based on the reason explained in the body paragraphs, traveling with a tour group is convenient, efficient, and more fun. What could be superior to that?
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in distinct ways.
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is the
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and here are my justifications.

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is
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.
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, last year I traveled to Turkey using my car and I stayed there for a week. Since I was working
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for several months, my primary goal in that
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was to relax myself and
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visiting a
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for the
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. Unfortunately, I did not
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as much as I
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vital problems. I did not know the language and regulations of the
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,
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I had
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communicating with
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and obviating my needs.
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myself understood and it was
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arduous. I wondered if I had traveled with a
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, I did not
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encounter with such issues. Taking pleasure would be my
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is the best.

Traveling with an
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is efficient. Since I am
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to the environment, I
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don&
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I should
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.
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, I
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have to
spend a significant amount of
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searching on the internet or on a map or ask others for guidance. The previous example can
be considered
here to exemplify too. In my
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to Turkey, I spent a substantial amount of
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asking from the
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people
in the street where should I
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or how can I go to this address. That was troublesome and
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time consuming
and could not afford to
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with a
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, the
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already knows the
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and addresses;
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is more fun. Since the
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has comprehensive information about the
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, he or she can exactly plan beforehand to leverage my
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. In this way, I can
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tourism attractions and nice
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. The
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will take care of everything and try
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to manage things in a way that I can
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is
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All in all, although
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way to
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is in a
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led by a
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. Based on the reason
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is convenient, efficient, and more fun. What could be superior to that?
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83Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO 16 – taks 2: The best way to travel is to travel in a group led by a tour guide. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
530 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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