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TPO 12 Task 2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v.1

TPO 12 Task 2 it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 1
As the worldwide market rises, A lot of products including the ones used every day are bought in other nations and are conveyed from a far distance. This essay is in agreement that the benefit of this trend outweighs its drawback. Hence, availability of a variety of product and lack of patronage of local goods will be discussed as its merit and demerit respectively. Diverse type of goods is made available in stock making community members to have options. Inter country trade increases the quantity and the variety of products being sold. A Nation does not have the ability of providing all the commodities needed by its inhabitant, this may be due to climate and environmental differences. It is essential to allow imported goods. This will avail the natives opportunity to explore other international products which are not produced in their own country. For example, Fruits like strawberry, apple, berries and most canned foods are not made in Nigeria. Therefore, buying from other nations where it is produced makes it accessible to everyone who has the need for them. Buying products from other countries will inhibit patronage of local stocks. Native manufacturers suffer the effect of foreign patronage, as the availability of foreign product causes reduction in the sale of Local staple goods. Thereby, increasing the amount of wastage if they are not purchased. Since human will always want a change, it is obvious that they will prefer new product than the ones familiar to them. For instance, Farmers who manufactures Nigerian rice, alarmed that the market became unfavourable because Nigerians are now depending on the imported rice neglecting their own. Which in turns, causes a significant drop in the profit made by farmers. In conclusion, it is evident that inter country trade enhances the quality of life of its members. As various types of goods are sold affording them the opportunity to eat healthy. Although, it has a negative effect on the local trade, its advantages are more than its disadvantages. Thus, it is recommended that inter nation trade should be encouraged.
As the worldwide market rises,
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products
including the
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ones
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used
every day are
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bought
in
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other
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nations
and
are conveyed
from a far distance. This essay is in agreement that the benefit of this trend outweighs its drawback.
Hence
, availability of a variety of
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product
and lack of patronage of local
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goods
will
be discussed
as its merit and demerit
respectively
.

Diverse type of
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goods
is made
available in stock making community members to have options. Inter
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country
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trade
increases the quantity and the variety of
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products
being sold
. A
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Nation
does not have the ability of providing all the commodities needed by its inhabitant, this may be due to climate and environmental differences. It is essential to
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allow
imported
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goods
. This will avail the natives opportunity to explore
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other
international
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products
which are not produced in their
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own
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country
.
For example
, Fruits like strawberry, apple, berries and most canned foods are not made in Nigeria.
Therefore
, buying from
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other
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nations
where it
is produced
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makes
it accessible to everyone who has the need for them.

Buying
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products
from
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other
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countries
will inhibit patronage of local stocks. Native manufacturers suffer the effect of foreign patronage, as the availability of foreign
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product
causes reduction in the sale
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of


Local staple
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goods
. Thereby, increasing the amount of wastage if they are not
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purchased
. Since human will always want a
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change
, it is obvious that they will prefer new
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product
than the
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ones
familiar to them.
For instance
, Farmers who
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manufactures
Nigerian rice, alarmed that the market became
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unfavourable
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because
Nigerians are
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now
depending on the imported rice neglecting their
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own
. Which in turns, causes a significant drop in the profit made by farmers.

In conclusion
, it is evident that inter
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country
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trade
enhances the quality of life of its members.
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As
various types of
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goods
are sold
affording them the opportunity to eat healthy. Although, it has a
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negative
effect on the local
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trade
, its advantages are more than its disadvantages.
Thus
, it
is recommended
that inter
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nation
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trade
should
be encouraged
.
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IELTS essay TPO 12 Task 2 it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
343 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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