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TPO4 Task2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than are today. v.1

TPO4 Task2 In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than are today. v. 1
The advertisements have changed drastically in the past few eras. This has affected the human society at large extent as people look into the advertisements and buy products that are superfluous to them, this is nothing but a business stunt. In this essay, I will delve into the influence of advertisements by throwing light on the food and toiletries industry and will support them through an example of incidents in India and Bangladesh in the year 2009. It is irrefutable that advertisements are important as they provide important information about the products, as well as the procedure to use it. For example, in 2009 there was an advertisement in India, about the instant grilled chicken and it was shown that if people buy it, the lucky purchaser will get a good coin. The sale of the product went up and broke whole of the sales records. Later, the product was banned due to the deteriorate quality of chicken used. There was another incident in Bangladesh in about the same time. There was an advertisement that imposed the viability of hair shaving kit more than a scissors. The cost of shaving kit was kept for Rs 300 and the scissors cost was just Rs 10, but still the company was able to show a record sales growth in that year. To conclude, there are few people who really evaluate the advertisement and the product inside the package, but the major part of the population believes in the advertisements, therefore I agree that advertisements do not share the correct information about the product but influence people to purchase the products.
The
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have
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changed
drastically
in the past few eras. This has
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affected
the human society at large extent as
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people
look into the
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advertisements
and
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buy
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products
that are superfluous to them, this is nothing
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but
a business stunt. In this essay, I will delve into the influence of
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advertisements
by throwing light on the food and toiletries industry and will support them through an example of incidents in India and Bangladesh in the year 2009.

It is irrefutable that
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advertisements
are
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important
as they provide
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important
information about the
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products
,
as well
as the procedure to
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use
it.
For example
, in 2009 there was an
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advertisement
in India, about the instant grilled chicken and it
was shown
that if
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people
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buy
it, the lucky purchaser will
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get
a
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good
coin. The sale of the
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product
went up and broke whole of the sales records. Later, the
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product
was banned
due to
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the deteriorate
quality of chicken
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used
.

There was another incident in Bangladesh in about the same time. There was an
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advertisement
that imposed the viability of hair shaving kit more than
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a scissors
. The cost of shaving kit was
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kept
for Rs 300 and the scissors cost was
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just
Rs 10,
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but
still
the
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company
was able to
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show
a record sales growth in that year.

To conclude
, there are few
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people
who
really
evaluate the
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advertisement
and the
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product
inside the package,
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but
the major part of the population believes in the
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advertisements
,
therefore
I
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agree
that
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advertisements
do not share the correct information about the
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product
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but
influence
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people
to
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purchase
the
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products
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO4 Task2 In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than are today. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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