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TPO 11The woman expresses her opinion about the college’s plan. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v.1

TPO 11The woman expresses her opinion about the college’s plan. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
Museums and Art Galleries are the depiction of tradition, culture and numerous historical events of a country. Such places are the symbol of ancient civilization and are very much fascinating to the interest of the people. In my opinion, Museums and Art Galleries should be open and free to the public because charging entry fees has certain drawbacks. People visiting Art Galleries and Museums are mostly obsessed with the artistic work and historical events. Therefore, such places have to be made appealing for the visitors. For this purpose, the management invests a substantial amount on interior design and decoration. For instance, European countries make a separate budget for such places just to make it attractive for the people. Knowing the fact that considerable amount of money is required for the operation and maintenance of museums and art galleries, entry fee is charged by the general public. However, charging fees is a major pitfall because we cannot ignore the fact that such places are mostly visited by school children and elderly people. Museums and Art Galleries are imperative for the children to visit because it increases their knowledge and help them to think in wider perspective. The entry fee, however, is resisting many schools to organize such informative trips for their students. I believe that charging an entry fee is detrimental to the interest of the general public, specifically children, old people and lower middle class families who cannot afford to pay fees. Therefore, in my opinion, the government should bear the operational cost such places and make the entry free of cost to the public.
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and
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Art
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Galleries
are the depiction of tradition, culture and numerous historical
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events
of a country. Such
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places
are the symbol of ancient civilization and are
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very
much fascinating to the interest of the
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people
. In my opinion,
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Museums
and
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Art
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Galleries
should be open and free to the public
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because
charging
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entry
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fees
has certain drawbacks.

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People
visiting
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Art
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Galleries
and
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Museums
are
mostly
obsessed with the artistic work and historical
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events
.
Therefore
, such
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places
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have to
be made
appealing for the visitors. For this purpose, the management invests a substantial amount on interior design and decoration.
For instance
, European countries
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make
a separate budget for such
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places
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just
to
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make
it attractive for the
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people
. Knowing the fact that considerable amount of money
is required
for the operation and maintenance of
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museums
and
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art
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galleries
,
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entry
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fee
is charged
by the
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general public
.

However
, charging
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fees
is a major pitfall
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because
we cannot
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ignore
the fact that such
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places
are
mostly
visited by school children and elderly
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people
.
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Museums
and
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Art
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Galleries
are imperative for the children to visit
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because
it increases their knowledge and
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help
them to
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think
in wider perspective. The
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entry
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fee
,
however
, is resisting
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many
schools to organize such informative trips for their students.

I believe that charging an
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entry
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fee
is detrimental to the interest of the
Consider using "public".
general public
,
specifically
children,
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old
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people
and lower middle
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class
families who cannot afford to pay
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fees
.
Therefore
, in my opinion, the
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government
should bear the operational cost such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
and
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make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entry
free of cost to the public.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 11The woman expresses her opinion about the college’s plan. State her opinion and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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