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In recent years, many small shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this positive or a negative statement? v.1

In recent years, many small shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this positive or a negative statement? v. 1
There are invariably some unexpected events happening to us in our lives. Some assert that we had better take upon these accidental incidents, while others insist that we need to do our best to alleviate them. In my opinion, we should face undesired occurrences and utilise our wisdom to reverse the table. From the perspective of the former, to accept it because (1) the event had happened; thus, we could not change anything past; (2) our lives need to continue so we have to face reality. A few years ago, my father-in-law passed away suddenly because of a heart attack and afterwards, my mother-in-law had depression, making my wife undertook all pressures in her family. The only decision she did was to embrace the accident and to continue her life as she was able to go back to the past. In terms of the latter, what we should do is to improve such circumstances through striving and positive actions. In their standpoints, given our lives had gone worse, we have to do active actions to prevent the situation from being worse and worse. For example, my saving was nearly run out of as I paid for the tuition fee and accommodation when I studied at the university; hence, I worked out a plan to save money in order to spend the difficulty. I did two part-time jobs and walked to the school, and only had meals at home. Only by doing this could I afford the tough period. In conclusion, the most challenging scenario is in light of how you cope with the unacceptable incident. I think that you can accept it, but you cannot let it go worse again; therefore, you have to brainstorm and make active decisions to overcome it.
There are
invariably
some
unexpected
events
happening to us in our
lives
.
Some
assert that we had better take upon these accidental incidents, while others insist that we need to do our best to alleviate them. In my opinion, we should face undesired occurrences and
utilise
our wisdom to reverse the table.

From the perspective of the former, to accept it
because
(1) the
event
had happened;
thus
, we could not
change
anything past; (2) our
lives
need to continue
so
we
have to
face reality. A few years ago, my father-in-law passed away
suddenly
because
of a heart attack and afterwards, my mother-in-law had depression, making my wife undertook all pressures in her family. The
only
decision she did
was
to embrace the accident and to continue her life as she was able to go back to the past.

In terms of the latter, what we should do is to
improve
such circumstances through striving and
positive
actions. In their standpoints,
given
our
lives
had gone
worse
, we
have to
do active actions to
prevent
the situation from being
worse
and
worse
.
For example
, my saving was
nearly
run out of as I paid for the tuition fee and accommodation when I studied at the university;
hence
, I worked out a plan to save money in order to spend the difficulty. I did two part-time jobs and walked to the school, and
only
had meals at home.
Only
by doing this could I afford the tough period.

In conclusion
, the most challenging scenario is in light of how you cope with the unacceptable incident. I
think
that you can accept it,
but
you cannot
let
it go
worse
again;
therefore
, you
have to
brainstorm and
make
active decisions to overcome it.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In recent years, many small shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this positive or a negative statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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