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Soon technology will provide smart cars: that virtually drive themselves. Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they challenge specific points made in the reading passage. v.1

Soon technology will provide smart cars: that virtually drive themselves. Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they challenge specific points made in the reading passage. v. 1
The reading passage and the lecture have conflicting opinions about whether the advance of technology by providing smart cars will bring more positive or negative consequences to the users, drivers, and cities. The article presumes that this new technology created to transportation will provide only improvements, since a human would not be in charge of controlling the vehicles. On the other hand, the listening part affirms the opposite. Since technology process also have its fails. First of all, according to the reading smart cars will prevent accidents, since they will be equiped with sensors that can detect other cars and obstacles on the way. However the lecturer disputes this part. She says that because technology fails all time, many more cars can be involved in an car crash. Secondly, the reading states that because cars will be controlled by computers, the traffic will disappear. The system will make sure that cars will follow each other closely, increasing the speed on the roads and resulting in less traffic. This feature will also encourage more people to commute, since they would spend less time during their travel. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. She argues that driving with more convenience can actually introduce more cars on the streets, increasing traffic. Therefore, decreasing people interests in commute. Finally, the reading claims that technology will provide less costs in veichles maintenance by choosing better routes. Also less money will be spent in repairs, since the mechanic system will not get affected by problems like holes and other obstacles on the streets. On the other hand the lecturer believes that the more advanced the equipment the more expensive its repairs. The technology will not help people to save any money.
The
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passage and the lecture have conflicting opinions about whether the advance of
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technology
by providing smart
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cars
will bring more
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positive
or
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negative
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consequences to
the users, drivers, and cities. The article presumes that this new
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technology
created to transportation will provide
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only
improvements, since a human would not be in charge of controlling the vehicles. On the
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other
hand, the listening part affirms the opposite.
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Since
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technology
process
also
have its fails.

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First of all
, according to the
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smart
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cars
will
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prevent
accidents, since they will be
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equiped
with sensors that can detect
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other
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cars
and obstacles on the way.
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However
the lecturer disputes this part. She says that
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because
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technology
fails all time,
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many
more
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cars
can
be involved
in
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an
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car
crash.

Secondly
, the
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states that
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because
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cars
will
be controlled
by computers, the traffic will disappear. The system will
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make
sure that
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cars
will follow each
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other
closely
, increasing the speed on the roads and resulting in
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less
traffic. This feature will
also
encourage more
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people
to commute, since they would spend
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less
time during their travel.

Nevertheless
, the lecturer refutes this argument. She argues that driving with more convenience can actually introduce more
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cars
on the streets, increasing traffic.
Therefore
, decreasing
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people
interests in commute.

Finally
, the
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reading
claims that
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technology
will provide
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less
costs in
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veichles
maintenance by choosing better routes.
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Also
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less
money will
be spent
in repairs, since the mechanic system will not
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get
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affected
by problems like holes and
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other
obstacles on the streets. On the
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other
hand the lecturer believes that the more advanced the equipment the more expensive its repairs. The
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technology
will not
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help
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people
to save any money.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Soon technology will provide smart cars: that virtually drive themselves. Summarize the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they challenge specific points made in the reading passage. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
285 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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