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TPO-07 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO-07 - Independent Writing Task It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
The statement is widely debated all over the world that should we give priori to clear the fundamental concept of a subject or students just learn facts. I am agreeing with the statement. The important question is how our exam system should be, is it should base on facts and what happens previously or should be based on understanding the main idea and concept behind the topic. Our education system in our modern days is exam based. Students have to clear an entrance exam to enter a school or college or a course and students mugged up the subjects rather than understanding the concept, to pass the exam. Concept and idea be always priorities than facts. For example, every exam in our engineering course has mathematics and peoples usually try to remember some mathematical formula that would be useful in the exam but as soon as the exam was over they forget all the formulas and this is the bad side of memorizing some facts. In the other cases, if a student understands the idea and concept of a formula rather than just memorizing the formula, they can always remember the formula and never forget it. Education should always inspire students to free their minds and think differently and inspire them to invent new ways. If a student doesn’t understand the subject he or she can never love that and they don’t love the subjects that only harm students marks and they won' t inspire to invent new things. In the other side, some people think that, if the subject is history or some literature then there is the least thing to understand or clear the concept. For example, in history students actually memorize year of some battle or some invention or some events, there are not many things to understand. But I would say that, if students learned the behind story of an historical events or cause of that incident they could have easily memorize the facts. For some literature subjects, for example, English students learn it' s etymology to understand where it' s coming from or learned it' s phonetics to know how the words sound like. Thus the idea or concept behind a subject is important than knowing only that facts or memorize the formula or incident. Undemanding the idea students better understand the subject. By understanding the subjects they could be passionate about those subjects and that inspire them to invent.
The statement is
widely
debated all over the world that should we give
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priori
to
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clear
the fundamental
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concept
of a
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subject
or
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students
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just
learn facts. I
The verb 'agreeing' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
am agreeing
with the statement.

The
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important
question is how our exam system should be, is it should base on facts and what happens previously or should
be based
on understanding the main
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idea
and
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concept
behind the topic.

Our education system in our modern days is exam based.
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Students
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have to
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clear
an entrance exam to enter a school or college or a course and
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students
mugged up the
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subjects
rather
than understanding the
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concept
, to pass the exam.
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Concept
and
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idea
be always priorities than facts.
For example
, every exam in our engineering course has mathematics and peoples
usually
try to remember
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some
mathematical formula that would be useful in the exam
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but
as
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soon
as the exam was over they forget all the formulas and this is the
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bad
side of memorizing
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some
facts. In the other cases, if a
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student
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understands
the
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idea
and
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concept
of a formula
rather
than
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just
memorizing the formula, they can always remember the formula and never forget it. Education should always
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inspire
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students
to free their minds and
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think
differently
and
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inspire
them to invent new ways. If a
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student
doesn’t
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understand
the
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subject
he or she can never
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love
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that and
they don’t
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love
the
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subjects
that
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only
harm
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students
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marks and
they
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won&
#039; t
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inspire
to invent new things.

In the other side,
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some
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people
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think
that, if the
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subject
is history or
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some
literature then there is the least thing to
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understand
or
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clear
the
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concept
.
For example
, in history
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students
actually memorize year of
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some
battle or
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some
invention or
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some
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events
, there are not
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many
things to
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understand
.
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But
I would say that, if
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students
learned the behind story of an historical
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events
or cause of that incident they could have
easily
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memorize
the facts. For
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some
literature
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subjects
,
for example
, English
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students
learn
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it&
#039; s etymology to
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understand
where
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it&
#039; s coming from or learned
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it&
#039; s phonetics to know how the words sound like.
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Thus
the
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idea
or
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concept
behind a
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subject
is
Use "(important)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
important
than knowing
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only
that facts or memorize the formula or incident. Undemanding the
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idea
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students
better
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understand
the
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subject
. By understanding the
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subjects
they could be passionate about those
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subjects
and that
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inspire
them to invent.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-07 - Independent Writing Task It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
405 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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