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TPO 02 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO 02 It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Old friends are people with whom we have spent a great deal of time and gone through happiness and hardship of life. This isn' t true about new friends; they know nothing about our moods emotional lives. Nonetheless, they can broaden our view toward different facts that we were not aware of in advance. Even though both keeping old friends and making new friends can be beneficial, I subscribe to the view that it is more important to make new friends. Firstly, some old habits that we have formed are detrimental to our lives, and we wouldn' t figure that out until a new person enters our lives. if we stick to the same life we have had, we can never make progress. As an example, I personally had a friend for 9 years. We did the same thing every day; we used to wake up, call each other, go out until the night, and have dinner together. This happened every day. Although we used to spend a perfect time together, we could never manage to study and do more serious works. But apparently, this could not continue to happen forever. We needed to grow up at some point and think about our futures. I realized this when I found a new friend at university. She felt responsible for her life and never wasted the time that she could otherwise use to make progress. Making friend with here, I understood that the way I was living was so harmful to my future. Additionally, we learn new thing from new friends. Each person has had a different life, and thus, has different perspectives and opinions toward life. My new friend taught me how interesting since was and that my old interests have almost been artificial and nonrealistic. She also taught me that it' s natural to have emotions. For instance, I was ashamed that I cried whenever I felt sad. My old friend and I never expressed these feelings. So, we sometimes need to emancipate ourselves from bonds that we have set into our lives. One way to achieve this goal is to make new friends. On the other hand, one can relax in the vicinity of people and atmosphere that are more familiar. That is, old friends know numerous facts about our personality, they know how we need to be treated during difficulties. We can talk to them whenever we need someone to talk to, this will help us soothe our nerves. Morover, undoubtedly we all have a lot in common with old friends. we share intersts and hobbies. We have grown up and learnt about facts of life together. So it' s sometimes good to have old friends. To sum up, old friend and new friend have both advantages, however, due to personal experience, I believe we benefit the most from having new friends. We can reconsider the impact of old habits into our lives, learn about new facts, and attain a more successful life.
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friends
are
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people
with whom we have spent a great deal of time and gone through happiness and hardship of
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life
. This
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isn&
#039; t true about
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new
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friends
; they know nothing about our moods emotional
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lives
. Nonetheless, they can broaden our view toward
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different
facts that we were not aware of in advance.
Even though
both keeping
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old
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friends
and making
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new
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friends
can be beneficial, I subscribe to the view that it is more
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important
to
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make
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new
friends.

Firstly
,
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some
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old
habits that we have formed are detrimental to our
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lives
, and we
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wouldn&
#039; t figure that out until a
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new
person enters our
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lives
.
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if
we stick to the same
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life
we have had, we can never
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make
progress. As an example, I
personally
had a
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friend
for 9 years. We did the same thing every day; we
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used
to wake up, call each other, go out until the night, and have dinner together. This happened every day. Although we
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used
to spend a perfect time together, we could never manage to study and do more serious works.
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But
apparently
, this could not continue to happen forever. We needed to grow up at
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some
point and
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think
about our futures. I realized this when I found a
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new
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friend
at university. She felt responsible for her
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life
and never wasted the time that she could
otherwise
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use
to
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make
progress. Making
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friend
with here, I understood that the way I was living was
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so
harmful to my future.

Additionally
, we learn
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new
thing from
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new
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friends
. Each person has had a
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different
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life
, and
thus
, has
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different
perspectives and opinions toward
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life
. My
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new
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friend
taught me how interesting since was and that my
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old
interests have almost been artificial and
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nonrealistic
. She
also
taught me that
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it&
#039; s natural to have emotions.
For instance
, I
was ashamed
that I cried whenever I felt sad. My
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old
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friend
and I never expressed these feelings.
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So
, we
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sometimes
need to emancipate ourselves from bonds that we have set into our
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lives
. One way to achieve this goal is to
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make
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new
friends.

On the other hand
, one can relax in the vicinity of
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people
and atmosphere that are more familiar.
That is
,
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old
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friends
know numerous facts about our personality, they know how we need to
be treated
during difficulties. We can talk to them whenever we need someone to talk to, this will
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help
us soothe our nerves.
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Morover
,
undoubtedly
we all have a lot in common with
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old
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friends
.
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we
share
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intersts
and hobbies. We have grown up and
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learnt
about facts of
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life
together.
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So
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it&
#039; s
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sometimes
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good
to have
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old
friends.

To sum up,
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old
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friend
and
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new
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friend
have both advantages,
however
, due to personal experience, I believe we benefit the most from having
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new
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friends
. We can reconsider the impact of
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old
habits into our
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lives
, learn about
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new
facts, and attain a more successful
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life
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 02 It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
496 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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