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TPO-42 - Independent Writing TaskWorkers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v.2

TPO-42 - Independent Writing TaskWorkers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v. 2
Being satisfied with what you are doing is very important because if you like it, you do it better. Some people think workers are more happy when they do different types of tasks during workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. In my view, doing new thinngs can make workers happier for few reasons which I explain them below. First, when workers do new things, their minds are engaged to master that task, so they become very busy to figure out every detail of the new task. For example, I used to work for a mobile company, and I had to connect different components of the processor of the mobile phone. When I had to put together a new type of phone I had to focus really hard to do it correctly and not to make mistakes; however, after a while doing it I became reckless in connecting the components, so I connected the wrong components to each other. Second, doing a same job for a long period of time is very boring because you feel like you are a machine not a human. For example, I had a friend who was responsible for typing articles for a newspaper. He was in charge of this task for six hours each day nearly for ten years. He was very unsatisfied with his job, and sometimes he started to sleep on his work because he was very tired of the task. Third, doing new things during workday gives more experience to the workers because they get to be familiar with new types of situations and new types of problems. For instance, a very famous company allows its workers to solve a new puzzle each day after doing the normal work. This way, the minds of its workers are challenged and sometimes they debate and argue on the right answer, so the new and different puzzles for each day help the workers to broaden their thoughts to new field of subjects and become expert in that field. Basically, there are three reasons that doing different things during a workday can help employees to be happier and increase their efficiency: first, workers are engaged to master the new task; second, doing a repetitive task is very boring; third, it gives more experience to the workers.
Being satisfied
with what you are
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important
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because
if you like it, you do it better.
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people
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think
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workers
are more happy when they do
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different
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types
of
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tasks
during workday than when they do similar
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tasks
all day long. In my view,
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doing
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new
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thinngs
can
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make
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workers
happier for few reasons which I
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explain
them below.

First
, when
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workers
do
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new
things, their minds
are engaged
to master that
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task
,
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so
they become
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very
busy to figure out every detail of the
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new
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task
.
For example
, I
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used
to work for a mobile
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company
, and I had to connect
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different
components of the processor of the mobile phone. When I had to put together a
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new
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type
of phone I had to focus
really
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hard
to do it
correctly
and not to
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make
mistakes;
however
, after a while
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doing
it I became reckless in connecting the components,
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so
I connected the
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wrong
components to each other.

Second,
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doing
a same job for a long period of time is
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very
boring
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because
you feel like you are a machine not a human.
For example
, I had a friend who was responsible for typing articles for a newspaper. He was in charge of this
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task
for six hours each day
nearly
for ten years. He was
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very
unsatisfied with his job, and
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sometimes
he
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started
to sleep on his work
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because
he was
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very
tired of the task.

Third,
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doing
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new
things during workday gives more experience to the
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workers
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because
they
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get
to be familiar with
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new
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types
of situations and
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new
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types
of problems.
For instance
, a
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very
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famous
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company
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allows
its
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workers
to solve a
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new
puzzle each day after
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doing
the normal work. This way, the minds of its
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workers
are challenged
and
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sometimes
they debate and argue on the right answer,
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so
the
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new
and
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different
puzzles for each day
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help
the
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workers
to broaden their thoughts to
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new
field of subjects and become expert in that field.

Basically
, there are three reasons that
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doing
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different
things during a workday can
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help
employees to be happier and increase their efficiency:
first
,
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workers
are engaged
to master the
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new
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task
; second,
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doing
a repetitive
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task
is
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very
boring; third, it gives more experience to the
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workers
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-42 - Independent Writing TaskWorkers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
384 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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