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Tourism is always a force of good which enables people of different countries to understand each other. to what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Tourism is always a force of good which enables people of different countries to understand each other. v. 1
Touristy has become one of the main benefits of globalisation and democracy as well as international contract. Massive of masses deem that the way of travel provides a number of positive aspects while another dwellers disagree this view, they think that travel puts down bad impact on their community. According to my prospective, I reckon that tourist gives more benefits far out the drawbacks. Ironically enough, with regards to international travellers people enhance their culture as well as they get information pertaining to various traditional foods, places, clothes, so forth. Beside this, the economy also inclined by international visitors so, the plethora of folks have the opportunity to get a job in this field, it means that global journeyer develop occupations in other nations Moving further, with the support of globalization, masses have a chance to meet other society 's dwellers additionally, they make strong relationship bonding to each other. besides, a myriad of business also rely on export and import, products, through this folks can know about international goods. Therefore, travel gives tremendous benefits for the community. However, despite various merits it has also some drawbacks, first and foremost, multiple of people believe that, the visitors put worse influence on environment in addition, air pollution, increased day by day, many species are endangered as well as some are disappearing, thus, it is a negative point of territory. In conclusion, it can be inferred that, tourist gives tremendous benefits rather than demerits, with the aspect of visitors, the economy of public has developed as well as most businesses also depend on tourists.
Touristy has become one of the main
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benefits
of
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globalisation
and democracy as
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well
as
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international
contract. Massive of masses deem that the way of travel provides a number of
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positive
aspects while another dwellers disagree this view, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that travel puts down
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impact on their community. According to my prospective, I reckon that tourist gives more
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benefits
far out the drawbacks.

Ironically
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enough
,
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with regards to
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international
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travellers
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people
enhance their culture as
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well
as they
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get
information pertaining to various traditional foods, places, clothes,
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so
forth. Beside this, the economy
also
inclined by
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international
visitors
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so
, the plethora of folks have the opportunity to
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get
a job in this field, it means that global journeyer develop occupations in other nations Moving
further
, with the support of
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globalization
, masses have a chance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
other society 's dwellers
additionally
, they
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make
strong relationship bonding to each other.
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besides
, a myriad of business
also
rely on export and import, products, through
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this
folks can know about
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international
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goods
.
Therefore
, travel gives tremendous
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benefits
for the community.

However
, despite various merits it has
also
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some
drawbacks,
first
and foremost, multiple of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that, the visitors put worse influence on environment
in addition
, air pollution, increased day by day,
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many
species
are endangered
as
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well
as
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some
are disappearing,
thus
, it is a
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negative
point of territory.

In conclusion
, it can
be inferred
that, tourist gives tremendous
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benefits
rather
than demerits, with the aspect of visitors, the economy of public has developed as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
as most businesses
also
depend on tourists.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Tourism is always a force of good which enables people of different countries to understand each other. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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