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Topic: University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Topic: University education should be free for all students. v. 1
Many students these days like to pursue higher studies, at least once in their students' lives. In this context, it is said that universities should provide teaching to all learners free of cost. However, I strongly believe universities should charge every beneficiary for the following two reasons. The first reason why students have to be charged is, when studies are free, I think they may not take this seriously and, thus, may not utilise it to the full extent possible. In other words, people do not often appreciate the importance of something, including teaching when provided to them without any fee, and thus, they may not attend or enrol for those free courses thinking they are of poor quality. University classes, therefore, should be charged for at least a few dollars, so that students will feel that those are of not inferior quality and as a result, the attendance rates may be improved. The other reason, why money has to be collected from scholars is for the maintenance of academic institutions. This is because many of these institutions have to self generate funds for the smooth functioning of their administration. Many educational institutions, which once provided free teaching in the past, for instance, were failing to cater enough budget for research and staff salaries because of lack of funds and were closed ultimately. Hence, I believe if no one is paying back their institutions in the form of money, it would seriously affect the sustainability of these organisations due to limited finances to run academics. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the universities should collect money from students, for what they are providing, because it not only does increase the learner's credibility towards the quality of education provided by academies, but it also helps to offer financial aid to run them smoothly.
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Many
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students
these days like to pursue higher studies, at least once in their students'
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lives
. In this context, it
is said
that
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universities
should provide teaching to all learners
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free
of cost.
However
, I
strongly
believe
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universities
should charge every beneficiary for the following two reasons.

The
first
reason why
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students
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have to
be charged
is, when studies are
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free
, I
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think
they may not take this
seriously
and,
thus
, may not
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utilise
it to the full extent possible.
In other words
,
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people
do not
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often
appreciate the importance of something, including teaching when provided to them without any fee, and
thus
, they may not attend or enrol for those
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free
courses thinking they are of poor quality.
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University
classes,
therefore
, should
be charged
for at least a few dollars,
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so
that
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students
will feel that those are of not inferior quality and
as a result
, the attendance rates may be
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improved
.

The other reason, why money
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has to
be collected
from scholars is for the maintenance of academic institutions. This is
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because
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many
of these institutions
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have to
self generate funds for the smooth functioning of their administration.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
educational institutions, which once provided
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free
teaching in the past,
for instance
, were failing to cater
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enough
budget for research and staff salaries
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of lack of funds and
were closed
ultimately
.
Hence
, I believe if no one is paying back their institutions in the form of money, it would
seriously
affect the sustainability of these
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.
organisations
due to limited finances to run academics.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that the
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universities
should collect money from
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students
, for what they are providing,
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because
it not
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only
does increase the learner's credibility towards the quality of education provided by academies,
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but
it
also
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helps
to offer financial aid to run them
smoothly
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Topic: University education should be free for all students. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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