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Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion. v.3

Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. v. 3
The need for educating people from elementary level to the tertiary has caused a clamour for free education at those levels. This is particularly important because not everyone, although bearing a part of the country's future, can access it. While I agree it is important that everyone is educated, I disagree that every level should not be paid for. Looking at the fast decaying nature of some developing countries' economy, we may start wondering why the rich, who surely could pay for the fees for their children, cannot promise a sustainable positive development. This is why everyone should be educated. It is noteworthy that people from richer homes have been attributed to low success stories in the academic world. Both the well to do and below poverty level need equal opportunities to create change. In other words, making education accessible to everyone might just be opening doors to the next world changer. Even when this is done, there is still need to regulate what people can receive for free. Unpaid services have been looked down upon in many cases, meaning people's attachment naturally falls for whatever they had made a commitment to. For instance, many scholars play truancy because they are receiving free education from the government. If they had paid for it, their seriousness would have been recorded on a large scale. Therefore, some levels of education, like what is received at the universities, should be paid for. In conclusion, the doors to equal education should be open to every citizen of a country. Nevertheless, some levels need the learner's direct financial involvements in order that keen interest is ignited.
The
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need
for educating
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people
from elementary
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level
to the tertiary has caused a
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clamour
for free
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education
at those
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levels
. This is
particularly
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important
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because
not
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everyone
, although bearing a part of the country's future, can access it. While I
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agree
it is
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important
that
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everyone
is educated
, I disagree that every
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level
should not
be paid
for.

Looking at the
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fast
decaying nature of
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some
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developing countries
' economy, we may
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start
wondering why the rich, who
surely
could pay for the fees for their children, cannot promise a sustainable
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positive
development. This is why
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everyone
should
be educated
. It is noteworthy that
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people
from richer homes have
been attributed
to low success stories in the academic world. Both the
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well to do
and below poverty
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level
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need
equal opportunities to create
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change
.
In other words
, making
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education
accessible to
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everyone
might
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just
be opening doors to the
next
world changer.

Even when this
is done
, there is
still
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need
to regulate what
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people
can receive for free. Unpaid services have
been looked
down upon in
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many
cases, meaning
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people
's attachment
naturally
falls for whatever they had made a commitment to.
For instance
,
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many
scholars play truancy
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because
they are receiving free
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education
from the
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government
. If they had paid for it, their seriousness would have
been recorded
on a large scale.
Therefore
,
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some
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levels
of
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education
, like what
is received
at the universities, should
be paid
for.

In conclusion
, the doors to equal
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education
should be open to every citizen of a country.
Nevertheless
,
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some
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levels
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need
the learner's direct financial involvements in order that keen interest
is ignited
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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