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Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education, from primary to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? v.5

Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education, from primary to tertiary education, should be free. v. 5
Should all individuals irrespective of their social class have access to education? Some people think that all levels of schooling should be without a cost. In my opinion, I vehemently disagree with this perspective and this essay will discuss the rationale for my opinion. The first reason why I completely disagree that schooling should not be without cost is because of its value. People tend to place more value on goods or services that they pay for; therefore, free education will reduce the value of the service, and schooling is not left out. For example, in Lagos, Nigeria, the final examination of high school students is paid by the State Government and many of these students do not prepare for this exam, unlike their counterparts in other states who have to pay this exam fee themselves. Indeed, a case-control study revealed that there has been a sharp decline in the percentage of students who passed the annual exam since the Government started paying for the fees. Another reason why I absolutely disagree that education should be free is because the learning sector is a revenue-generating stream. The educational sector of many countries is a mutually beneficial one, that is, it is beneficial both to the Government and the citizens. While the people get access to good schooling; it is a source of revenue for the nation, which stems purely from the tuition of the students and is used to fund other sectors such as research. For instance, United Kingdom gets two-third of its yearly budget for training; hence, making learning free for all means that countries like this will go into recession. In conclusion, some individuals feel that all stages of schooling should be free. I strongly disagree with this notion and this essay discussed the reasons for my perspective.
Should all individuals irrespective of their social
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class
have access to education?
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Some
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people
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think
that all levels of
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schooling
should be without a cost. In my opinion, I
vehemently
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disagree
with this perspective and this essay will discuss the rationale for my opinion.

The
first
reason why I completely
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disagree
that
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schooling
should not be without cost is
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because
of its value.
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People
tend to place more value on
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goods
or services that they pay for;
therefore
,
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free
education will
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reduce
the value of the service, and
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schooling
is not
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left
out.
For example
, in Lagos, Nigeria, the final examination of high school
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students
is paid
by the State
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Government
and
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many
of these
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students
do not prepare for this exam, unlike their counterparts in other states who
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have to
pay this exam fee themselves.
Indeed
, a case-control study revealed that there has been a sharp decline in the percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
who passed the annual exam since the
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Government
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started
paying for the fees.

Another reason why I
absolutely
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disagree
that education should be
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free
is
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because
the learning sector is a revenue-generating stream. The educational sector of
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many
countries is a
mutually
beneficial one,
that is
, it is beneficial both to the
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Government
and the citizens. While the
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people
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get
access to
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good
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schooling
; it is a source of revenue for the nation, which stems
purely
from the tuition of the
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students
and is
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used
to fund other sectors such as research.
For instance
, United Kingdom
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gets
two-third of its yearly budget for training;
hence
, making learning
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free
for all means that countries like this will go into recession.

In conclusion
,
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some
individuals feel that all stages of
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schooling
should be
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free
. I
strongly
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disagree
with this notion and this essay discussed the reasons for my perspective.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education, from primary to tertiary education, should be free. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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