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topic: Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

topic: Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. with this opinion? v. 1
There are many tongues in the world today; largely due to different tribes, nationalities and ethnic groups- many of which go extinct yearly. Some individuals believe that language extinction is for the best as the heart will be less complex; other people think that languages are important. But is that the case? This essay will argue that our languages are important and that the complexity of heart is not due to the presence of a plethora of languages. Many individuals think that a reduction in the number of languages we speak will go a long way in simplifying life. Although, there are approximately 1000 tongues spoken globally, an example of which is Nigeria where about 250 tongues are spoken. Furthermore, this makes the earth a complex place to live in. For example, communication is usually barred when one finds himself/herself in an environment that the citizens do not speak your tongue. This situation can be quite frustrating, hindering such a person from carrying on with his/her daily activities. While I understand that numerous languages increases the earth's complexity, each of these tongues are the identities of some tribes and ethnic groups. Erasing or losing these languages is equivalent to losing our identity, without which we are nothing. In addition, the presence of numerous tongues is not the sole reason behind the complicated earth we find ourselves today, as life can just be as hard in places where they speak similar tongues. Thus, I absolutely disagree that many languages will make the world today complex. In conclusion, some people think that life will be easier in the absence of many languages. This essay argues that losing our languages in a bid to make life easy is totally unacceptable.
There are
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tongues
in the world
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today
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due to
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different
tribes, nationalities and ethnic groups-
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many
of which go extinct yearly.
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Some
individuals believe that
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language
extinction is for the best as the heart will be less complex; other
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people
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think
that
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languages
are
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important
.
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But
is that the case? This essay will argue that our
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languages
are
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important
and that the complexity of heart is not due to the presence of a plethora of languages.

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individuals
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think
that a reduction in the number of
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languages
we speak will go a long way in simplifying
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life
. Although, there are approximately 1000
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tongues
spoken globally, an example of which is Nigeria where about 250
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tongues
are spoken
.
Furthermore
, this
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makes
the earth a complex place to
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live
in.
For example
, communication is
usually
barred when one finds himself/herself in an environment that the citizens do not speak your
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tongue
. This situation can be quite frustrating, hindering such a person from carrying on with his/her daily activities.

While I understand that numerous
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languages
increases the earth's complexity, each of these
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tongues
are the identities of
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some
tribes and ethnic groups. Erasing or losing these
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languages
is equivalent to losing our identity, without which we are nothing.
In addition
, the presence of numerous
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tongues
is not the sole reason behind the complicated earth we find ourselves
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today
, as
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life
can
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just
be as
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hard
in places where they speak similar
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tongues
.
Thus
, I
absolutely
disagree that
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many
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languages
will
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make
the world
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today
complex.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
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think
that
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life
will be easier in the absence of
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many
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languages
. This essay argues that losing our
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languages
in a bid to
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make
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life
easy is
totally
unacceptable.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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He who knows no foreign languages know nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay topic: Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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