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Topic: Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Topic: Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. v. 1
The technology is growing day by day and also has contributed us many ways for refurbishing with various news. In spite of the fact that some people believe that classical journal and magazines will be restored by present-day technology, I absolutely do not think so and from my point of view, this statement will not come true owing to a number of compelling reasons. To begin with, the most rational justification is that, become a habit. Simply put, reading the journal has become a firm custom for people over the years. A good illustration of this is, reading the morning paper and magazine by the people drinking tea or coffee is a phenomenon that can be seen every day. Yet, another compelling argument against statement is that, perception problems. That is, since reading e-books are harmful for eyesight many people try to prevent vision dilemmas by avoiding reading it. Take the headache caused by the destructive effects of electronic waves on the eyes as an example of this. This in turn, will appear by excessive staring at a mobile or computer screen. Furthermore, the problems of the elderly. Old age people who do not have much familiarity of technology will not be capable to read e-books and prefer to adopt the conventional daily and booklets to step up awareness and fill leisure time instead. To be concluded, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that, traditional paper and magazines will not be represented by e-books. This is mainly Because people do not easily give up their habits.
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ways for refurbishing with various news.
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people
believe that classical journal and magazines will
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think
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come
true owing to a number of compelling reasons.

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begin
with, the most rational justification is that, become a habit.
Simply
put,
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reading
the journal has become a firm custom for
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people
over the years. A
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good
illustration of this is,
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reading
the morning paper and magazine by the
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people
drinking tea or coffee is a phenomenon that can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
every day.

Yet
, another compelling argument against statement is that, perception problems.
That is
, since
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reading
e-books are harmful for eyesight
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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people
try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
vision dilemmas by avoiding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
it. Take the headache caused by the destructive effects of electronic waves on the eyes as an example of this. This in turn, will appear by excessive staring at a mobile or computer screen.

Furthermore
, the problems of the elderly.
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Old
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who do not have much familiarity of technology will not be capable to read e-books and prefer to adopt the conventional daily and booklets to step up awareness and fill leisure time
instead
. To
be concluded
, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to
be drawn
is that, traditional paper and magazines will not
be represented
by e-books. This is
mainly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do not
easily
give up their habits.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Topic: Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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