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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 6 - Using the examples from the talk, explain how persuasive strategies are used in advertising. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 6 - Using the examples from the talk, explain how persuasive strategies are used in advertising. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1
These days, many people are preferring fast food instead of having home food. The reason behind this is that they are very easy to cook. However, in order to address this problem government has to take strict action by raising the tax. The main cause of eating more junk food instead of home-cooked food is that they are very simple to cook. Due to an era of technology, such foods are easily available in the market and can be cooked by following simple steps. As a result, many people who do not get time to cook food at home as they are working all the time in order to have a better standard of living or to fulfil their basic needs, they prefer such foods over home meals. For instance, in Mumbai, 85% of people who are working from morning to evening go on the market and purchase such junk foods because they are tired and do not have enough time to cook at home. Thus, such foods are more purchased instead of eating at the house. The possible solution to address this issue is that the government should increase the taxes on such companies who manufacture such junk foods. To elaborate, if the higher authorities increase tax heavily on these companies, a common person or the working class will not able to purchase such food because these companies would cover such taxes indirectly by charging for them. As a result, they will switch to home-cooked food. For example, the Government of Japan had increased the rate of tax from 10% to 25% on the fast-food manufacturers’ in order to make its citizen to eat home food rather than eating junk food outside, resulted in they are active, fit and fine. In conclusion, having a better life or fulfilling basic needs a person works all the time and choose to eat processed food instead of home food. Only when the government would raise the taxes on such manufacturers’ who manufacture such foods, will this problem be solved.
These days,
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many
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people
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are preferring
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fast
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food
instead
of having home
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food
. The reason behind this is that they are
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very
easy to cook.
However
, in order to address this problem
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government
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has to
take strict action by raising the tax.

The main cause of eating more
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junk
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food
instead
of home-cooked
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food
is that they are
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very
simple to cook. Due to an era of technology, such
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foods
are
easily
available in the market and can
be cooked
by following simple steps.
As a result
,
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many
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people
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who
do not
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get
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time
to cook
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food
at home as they are working all the
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time
in order to have a better standard of living or to fulfil their basic needs, they prefer such
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foods
over home meals.
For instance
, in Mumbai, 85% of
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people
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who
are working from morning to evening go on the market and
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purchase
such
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junk
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foods
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because
they
are tired
and do not have
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enough
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time
to cook at home.
Thus
, such
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foods
are more
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purchased
instead
of eating at the
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house
.

The possible solution to address this issue is that the
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government
should increase the
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taxes
on such
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companies
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who
manufacture such
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junk
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foods
. To elaborate, if the higher authorities increase
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tax
heavily
on these
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companies
, a common person or the working
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class
will not able to
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purchase
such
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food
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because
these
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companies
would cover such
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taxes
indirectly
by charging for them.
As a result
, they will switch to home-cooked
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food
.
For example
, the
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Government
of Japan had increased the rate of
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tax
from 10% to 25% on the
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fast
-food manufacturers’ in order to
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make
its citizen to eat home
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food
rather
than eating
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junk
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food
outside, resulted in they are active, fit and fine.

In conclusion
, having a better life or fulfilling basic needs a person works all the
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time
and choose to eat processed
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food
instead
of home
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food
.
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Only
when the
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government
would raise the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
on such manufacturers’
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who
manufacture such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
, will this problem
be solved
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 6 - Using the examples from the talk, explain how persuasive strategies are used in advertising. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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