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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - Briefly summarize the woman’s problem. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - Briefly summarize the woman’s problem. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1
In the near future scientists will extend the possibility of human survival up to 2 centuries. While some hold the opinion that this is a positive development, others believe it is a catastrophic one. This essay will discuss both these views followed by a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, many argue that a long life will come with many health repercussions. Owing to the fragility of the human body, it was only designed to sustain 70 or so years of life. Therefore, many health ramifications may arise, such as heart disease, autoimmune diseases and infections. Which may affect older bodies on a larger scale, this is because, as we grow older, our bodies become less equipped to dealing with disease because they lose essential cells and body functions that usually combat disease. For instance, the antibody ‘Human Leukotrine Factor 6’ decreased by 40% by the age of 45. This is an imperative bodily defence mechanism in dealing with foreign bodies, without it bodies are more susceptible to disease. However, being able to live up to 200 years is without a doubt an incredibly positive development. This is because, those that have spent the early years of their life working and securing financial stability, who have missed out on developing their person relationships can now have a chance to do so with no distractions and interruptions. To exemplify, Human Timeline research conducted by Harvard University demonstrated that ‘a 60 year old male or female spend 60% of their lives working, 30% asleep and 10 percent for personal relations. ’ Prolonging human life gives us a chance to extend our personal relationships and deepen bonds. In conclusion, although there are many health complications that may arise from extending one’s life for so long, I believe they are worthwhile as people get to spend more time with their families and further explore their relationships and bonds.
In the near future scientists will extend the possibility of
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human
survival up to 2 centuries. While
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some
hold the opinion that this is a
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positive
development, others believe it is a catastrophic one. This essay will discuss both these views followed by a reasoned conclusion.

On the one hand,
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many
argue that a long
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life
will
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come
with
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many
health repercussions. Owing to the fragility of the
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human
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body
, it was
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only
designed to sustain 70 or
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so
years of
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life
.
Therefore
,
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many
health ramifications may arise, such as heart
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disease
, autoimmune
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diseases
and infections. Which may affect older
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bodies
on a larger scale, this is
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because
, as we grow older, our
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bodies
become less equipped to dealing with
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disease
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because
they lose essential cells and
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body
functions that
usually
combat
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disease
.
For instance
, the antibody
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‘Human
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Leukotrine
Factor 6’ decreased by 40% by the age of 45. This is an imperative
bodily
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defence
mechanism in dealing with foreign
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bodies
, without it
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bodies
are more susceptible to disease.

However
, being able to
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live
up to 200 years is without a doubt an
incredibly
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positive
development. This is
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because
, those that have spent the early years of their
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life
working and securing financial stability, who have missed out on developing their person relationships can
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now
have a chance to do
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so
with no distractions and interruptions. To exemplify,
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Human
Timeline research conducted by Harvard University demonstrated that ‘a 60
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year
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old
male or female spend 60% of their
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lives
working, 30% asleep and 10 percent for personal relations. ’ Prolonging
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human
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life
gives us a chance to extend our personal relationships and deepen bonds.

In conclusion
, although there are
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many
health complications that may arise from extending one’s
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life
for
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so
long, I believe they are worthwhile as
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people
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get
to spend more time with their families and
further
explore their relationships and bonds.
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 5 - Briefly summarize the woman’s problem. Then state which solution you would recommend. Explain the reasons for your recommendation. - Preparation Time: 20 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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