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The charts show what the history and engineering graduates were doing six months after graduating. v.1

The charts show what the history and engineering graduates were doing six months after graduating. v. 1
Now a day the traffic and environmental problems have dramatically increased. Many people believe that to overcome the increasing traffic and pollution issues, the cost of petrol should be raised. This essay will discuss this in detail also other ways to solve the problem of traffic and pollution. I agree that by increasing the price of petrol is one of the best ways for solving the issues of pollution as the use of petrol for various vehicles produces CO2, which is harmful for the environment. Furthermore, by increasing the price people will also be encouraged to use their bicycles for short distances or even walk. In contrast to that, the traffic problems will also be solved as well as the pollution issues will also overcome. There are many ways to overcome the increasing problem of traffic. Such as, firstly, by constructing wider roads. This will help to reduce the traffic during rush hours. Secondly, the government should develop proper traffic systems. For example In India due to poor traffic system many ppl die as people come from any directions. Therefore, to improve the a proper traffic system is to be developed. Similarly the government should impose heavy fine on the car owners whose car produces black smoke which causes air pollution. In conclusion, increasing the price of petrol helps to overcome the problem of traffic and environmental issues. But they there are other ways to do that. such as, build wider roads, imposing fine on cars that produces black smoke etc.
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ways
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petrol
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government
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government
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IELTS essay The charts show what the history and engineering graduates were doing six months after graduating. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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