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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Using the professor’s examples, explain the advertising technique of target marketing. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Using the professor’s examples, explain the advertising technique of target marketing. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1
Obesity has always been a problem which we had to face. This fact has only been proven right with the increase of fast food outlets. No matter what it is, the outlets do make a lot of money from our cravings. But what they do not tell us is the aftereffects of giving in to these cravings. Obesity is not to be taken lightly as it can have permanent consequences. One must take some really serious measures to reduce their weight to stay fit and healthy for a longer and a happy life. There are certain factors which lead to obesity. Other than the aforementioned consumption of fast foods, the other major thing which causes this is the lack of exercise. Not a lot of us actually take the time out of our busy schedules to go for a jog or play some kind of sport. Another really big issue is the issue of the mindset. Myself included, we tend to procrastinate a lot when things are within our range of control. It is not very healthy to lay in bed, watch TV or sit in front of the computer all day long. Even with the problems mentioned above, there are certain ways people can overcome this obstacle. The simplest one is to stay away from fast foods and have them occasionally instead of having them frequently. One way is to go on a calorie deficit. What this means is to consume less food and exercise more which in turn helps to burn more fat and eventually lose weight. Exercising in the mornings has proven to be more effective as our stomach is empty, which means the body uses the fat reserves. The motivation problem can be overcome by tuning your mind to follow a workout routine. Rewarding yourself if you achieve a fitness goal is a great way to motivate and train your mind to become accustomed to the new routine. In conclusion, I would like to say that obesity might be a problem which will continue for the years to come. It is not a disease which can be eradicated by a vaccine. It is something that a person has to really put in the effort and work towards to overcome it and actually lose weight. It is both a mental and a physical challenge, and I think the goal of reducing the cases of obesity will happen with a combined effort of individual goals put together.
Obesity has always been a
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problem
which we had to face. This fact has
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only
been proven
right with the increase of
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fast
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food
outlets. No matter what it is, the outlets do
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make
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a lot of
money from our cravings.
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But
what they do not
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tell
us is the aftereffects of giving in to these cravings. Obesity is not to
be taken
lightly
as it can have permanent consequences. One
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must
take
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some
really
serious measures to
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reduce
their weight to stay fit and healthy for a longer and a happy life.

There are certain factors which lead to obesity. Other than the aforementioned consumption of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
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foods
, the other major thing which causes this is the lack of exercise. Not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
us actually take the time out of our busy schedules to go for a jog or play
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some
kind of sport. Another
really
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big
issue is the issue of the mindset. Myself included, we tend to procrastinate a lot when things are within our range of control. It is not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
healthy to lay in bed,
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watch
TV or sit in front of the computer all day long.

Even with the
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problems
mentioned above, there are certain ways
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people
can overcome this obstacle. The simplest one is to stay away from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
and have them
occasionally
instead
of having them
frequently
. One way is to go on a calorie deficit. What this means is to consume less
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food
and exercise more which in turn
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to burn more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fat
and
eventually
lose weight. Exercising in the mornings has proven to be more effective as our stomach is empty, which means the body
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uses
the
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fat
reserves. The motivation
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problem
can
be overcome
by tuning your mind to follow a workout routine. Rewarding yourself if you achieve a fitness goal is a great way to motivate and train your mind to become accustomed to the new routine.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that obesity might be a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
which will continue for the years to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
. It is not a disease which can
be eradicated
by a vaccine. It is something that a person
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
really
put in the effort and work towards to overcome it and actually lose weight.
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It
is both a mental and a physical challenge, and I
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think
the goal of reducing the cases of obesity will happen with a combined effort of individual goals put together.
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 4 - Using the professor’s examples, explain the advertising technique of target marketing. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Seconds v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
409 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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