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3. People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

3. People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. v. 1
Life is all about ups and Downs. Some people face to many problematic conditions like an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. People's have different ways of dealing with it, some just tend to accept the worst situation and persist with it. While, others believe in fighting back and trying in progressing such disappointing situations. Personally, I completely agree with the second view. On the one hand, it sounds good in saying to improve awful things, however, evolving is not easy. Person have to embed every single thing. Living fully in the world is gratified by emotional and physical needs, moreover, basic physical wants are fulfilled by credit, we should have cash to buy things for yourself or our family. The peoples who accept the unsatisfactory works is all for the checks, we have to continue with it because basic demands are gained by paying bills. Despite of the fact that we aren't pleased with work environment or we aren't rewarded with good payment according to our qualifications, experiences and hard works. On the other hand, taking best attempts to conquer worse situation is a reliable way to deal with the obstacles of life and it would reward you with a great career. For instance, in my neighbourhood, there was a student who was born in a poor family, his parents were farmers and did not have enough money to pay for fees if he had gone to the university. It was admirable that he tries his best in study and gained the scholarship of his favourite university and became an official student. After that, by his efforts every day, when he graduated, he became a professional doctor as he desired and has earned a lot of money per month. Hence, he and his parents have had a most wonderful life with adequate convenience, Therefore the harder you try, the more success you gain. All in all, perception varies from person to person so, ways to tackle situations also totally depend on individuals believes. Each of them might bring both physical and mental benefits for people.
Life is all about ups and Downs.
Some
people
face to
many
problematic conditions like an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.
People
's have
different
ways of dealing with it,
some
just
tend to accept the worst
situation
and persist with it. While, others believe in fighting back and trying in progressing such disappointing
situations
.
Personally
, I completely
agree
with the second view.

On the one hand, it sounds
good in saying
to
improve
awful things,
however
, evolving is not easy. Person
have to
embed every single thing. Living
fully
in the world
is gratified
by emotional and physical needs,
moreover
, basic physical wants
are fulfilled
by credit, we should have cash to
buy
things for yourself or our family. The peoples who accept the unsatisfactory works is all for the
checks
, we
have to
continue with it
because
basic demands
are gained
by paying bills.
Despite of
the fact that we aren't
pleased
with work
environment or
we aren't rewarded with
good
payment according to our qualifications, experiences and
hard
works.

On the other hand
, taking best attempts to conquer worse
situation
is a reliable way to deal with the obstacles of life and it would reward you with a great career.
For instance
, in my
neighbourhood
, there was a student who
was born
in a poor family, his parents were farmers and did not have
enough
money to pay for fees if he had gone to the university. It was admirable that he tries his best in study and gained the scholarship of his
favourite
university and became an official student. After that, by his efforts every day, when he graduated, he became a professional doctor as he desired and has earned
a lot of
money per month.
Hence
, he and his parents have had a most wonderful life with adequate convenience,
Therefore
the harder you try, the more success you gain.

All in all, perception varies from person to person
so
, ways to tackle
situations
also
totally
depend on individuals believes. Each of them might bring both physical and mental benefits for
people
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 3. People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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