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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.40

There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 40
Recently, myriads of people have become obsessed with purchasing varied kinds of domestics goods more than before in many countries around the world. In my opinion, this is a negative development because it can give rise to environmental pollution, seduce people to utilise manufacturing food rather than wholesome food, and devastate the farming lands. This essay would aim at elucidating the aforementioned notions in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, in the past few decades, people tended to buy a lot of products to satisfy their needs, which leads to detrimental effects on the environment. To point out this idea, those people perhaps consumed a colossal amount of outputs that had been bought from the markets. As a result, environmental pollution can be expanded because of dumping wastes of humans products that cause water pollution. Thus, water creatures can be damaged due to eating these wastes. Additionally, many people burn their wastes to get rid of surplus food; therefore, air pollution and global warming can be exacerbated. This is due to the gases that, emit of the burning products and trapped in the atmosphere, lead to global warming and can damage the earth. Secondly, this attitude of purchasing goods can not only promote addicting engineering food more than the healthy one, but also it may afflict farming and plantation. To clarify this idea, when people always go to buy their monthly household products, they sometimes rely on junk food that might afflict negatively on their health. On the other hand, this trend can exhaust the farming lands due to the vast consumption of the products. For instance, in Egypt, rice is categorically consumed, so the areas are depleted by ploughing them more than one time. To conclude, a multitude of citizens become fascinated to spend a lot of money on household needs than before, which affects their life. It can devastate the environment throughout by causing air and water pollution and pay attention to the using of junk food that harms their fitness.
Recently, myriads of
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people
have become obsessed with purchasing varied kinds of domestics
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goods
more than
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before
in
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many
countries around the world. In my opinion, this is a
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negative
development
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because
it can give rise to environmental
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pollution
, seduce
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people
to
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utilise
manufacturing
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food
rather
than wholesome
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food
, and devastate the farming lands. This essay would aim at elucidating the aforementioned notions in the subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with, in the past few decades,
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people
tended to
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buy
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a lot of
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products
to satisfy their needs, which leads to detrimental effects on the environment. To point out this
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idea
, those
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people
perhaps consumed a colossal amount of outputs that had been
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bought
from the markets.
As a result
, environmental
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pollution
can
be expanded
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because
of dumping wastes of humans
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products
that cause water
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pollution
.
Thus
, water creatures can
be damaged
due to eating these wastes.
Additionally
,
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many
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people
burn their wastes to
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get
rid of surplus
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food
;
therefore
, air
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pollution
and global warming can
be exacerbated
. This is due to the gases that, emit of the burning
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products
and trapped in the atmosphere, lead to global warming and can damage the earth.

Secondly
, this attitude of purchasing
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goods
can not
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only
promote addicting engineering
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food
more than the healthy one,
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but
also
it may afflict farming and plantation. To clarify this
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idea
, when
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people
always go to
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buy
their monthly household
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products
, they
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sometimes
rely on junk
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food
that might afflict
negatively
on their health.
On the other hand
, this trend can exhaust the farming lands due to the vast consumption of the
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products
.
For instance
, in Egypt, rice is
categorically
consumed,
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so
the areas
are depleted
by
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ploughing
them more than one time.

To conclude
, a multitude of citizens become fascinated to spend
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a lot of
money on household
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needs
than
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before
, which affects their
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life
. It can devastate the environment throughout by causing air and water
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pollution
and pay attention to the using of junk
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food
that harms their fitness.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 40

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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