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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 7
Wheater, elevated sales of popular consumer goods are a regular of powerful advertising and not the real requirements of the society, many people believe that the influence of advertisement results in higher sales of goods. However, a lot of individuals disagree. This essay highlights the both points of views. Nowadays, billions of companies produce and sell their product with the palpable role of the advertising. In the other words, advertising is key weapon, to sell the product into the people. However, advertising influence the buyers to purchase product while, that they do not need. For example, advertising makes many strategies and give much information about the product, with the help of television, radio, and newspaper. Secondly, people procure product very quickly, which they have not actual need. The laptop is one of the best examples. Sometime, people have a good laptop, but the influence of the advertisement they buy the new laptop because new gadget has a new feature which help them in every field. On the other hand, advertising reflects our minds. Commercial not promote the product, unless they also stimulate the lifestyle. Some people argue that advertising is a very helpful to describe the product in briefly. ‘Maruti Suzuki’ car is a one of the best examples, a company introduces all safety major and new feature about the car. So, people buy the new car for their safety majors. At lastly, people have diagnosed with some diseases advertising help him to solve their problem. Many companies invest huge money in the medical stream for development and research the new medicine for the people to easily require within two or three days and companies give the advices through the bulletin. In conclusion, I think that advertisement provokes the people to buy the product, whilst people have cared about the products before they purchase.
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Wheater
, elevated sales of popular consumer
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goods
are a regular of powerful advertising and not the real requirements of the society,
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many
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people
believe that the influence of advertisement results in higher sales of
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goods
.
However
,
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a lot of
individuals disagree. This essay highlights the both points of views.

Nowadays, billions of
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companies
produce and sell their
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product
with the palpable role of the advertising. In the other words, advertising is key weapon, to sell the
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product
into the
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people
.
However
, advertising influence the buyers to
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purchase
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product
while, that they do not need.
For example
, advertising
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makes
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many
strategies and give much information about the
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product
, with the
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help
of television, radio, and newspaper.
Secondly
,
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people
procure
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product
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very
quickly
, which they have not actual need. The laptop is one of the best examples. Sometime,
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people
have a
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good
laptop,
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but
the influence of the advertisement they
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buy
the
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new
laptop
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because
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new
gadget has a
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new
feature which
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help
them in every field.

On the other hand
, advertising reflects our minds. Commercial not promote the
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product
, unless they
also
stimulate the lifestyle.
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Some
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people
argue that advertising is a
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very
helpful to
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describe
the
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product
in
briefly
. ‘
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Maruti
Suzuki’ car is a one of the best examples, a
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company
introduces all safety major and
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new
feature about the car.
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So
,
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people
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buy
the
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new
car for their safety majors. At
lastly
,
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people
have diagnosed with
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some
diseases advertising
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help
him to solve their problem.
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Many
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companies
invest huge money in the medical stream for development and research the
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new
medicine for the
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people
to
easily
require within two or three days and
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companies
give the advices through the bulletin.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that advertisement provokes the
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people
to
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buy
the
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product
, whilst
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people
have cared about the
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products
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before
they
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purchase
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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