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Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v.4

Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 4
In the present time, men and women are travelling to various locations more than the past. This is because travel tickets have become affordable and it has benefits as it makes the traveller stress-free. People are travelling more because tickets have become cheaper. That is to say, these days, there are multiple airlines available for a single destination and they offer tickets at a competitive price because of increased competition in the market. Also, the network of the railways has drastically increased over the last few years connecting almost every city and town. As a result, people find travelling to be comfortable and buying tickets is within their budgets. To illustrate, a recent survey by the Times of India revealed that as compared to the last decade, the tourism industry has increased by 30% as people travel more often because of tickets are pocket-friendly. The benefits of travelling are that it helps the traveller to relax. In other words, when people travel, they are neither committed to work nor they have to follow their daily routine. Thus, getting a break from a hectic lifestyle relaxes their mind and body and they return energized from their vacation. Therefore, travelling to different places helps them to work efficiently and lead a happy life. For instance, a recent report by the CNN Travel Magazine revealed that 55%of people prefer travelling to unexplored destinations as it helps them to unwind and stay happy. In conclusion, as compared to the older times people are wandering more because travel tickets are no more expensive and it benefits them as they are able to relax. It is recommended that people should go on a vacation once a year to stay healthy and happy.
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to various locations more than the past. This is
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because
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travel
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tickets
have become affordable and it has benefits as it
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traveller
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stress
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travelling
more
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because
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tickets
have become cheaper.
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to say, these days, there are multiple airlines available for a single
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destination and
they offer
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tickets
at a competitive price
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because
of increased competition in the market.
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, the network of the railways has
drastically
increased over the last few years connecting almost every city and town.
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,
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people
find
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travelling
to be comfortable and buying
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tickets
is within their budgets. To illustrate, a recent survey by
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the Times of India
revealed that as compared to the last decade, the tourism industry has increased by 30% as
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people
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travel
more
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often
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because
of
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tickets
are pocket-friendly.

The benefits of
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traveller
to relax.
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people
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travel
, they are neither committed to
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work nor
they
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have to
follow their daily routine.
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, getting a break from a hectic lifestyle relaxes their mind and
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body and
they return energized from their vacation.
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travelling
to
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different
places
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helps
them to work
efficiently
and lead a happy life.
For instance
, a recent report by the CNN
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Travel
Magazine revealed that 55%of
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people
prefer
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travelling
to unexplored destinations as it
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helps
them to unwind and stay happy.

In conclusion
, as compared to the older times
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people
are wandering more
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because
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travel
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tickets
are no more expensive and it benefits them as they are able to relax. It
is recommended
that
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people
should go on a vacation once a year to stay healthy and happy.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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