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Today, more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v.6

Travelling is a trending hobby of the new fangled people in this modern scenario, where it is reckoned that multitudes are travelling more than the past time. There are plethora of reasons as well as numerous advantages that traveller have from their voyage. Why people travelled from one place to another? The dwellers have various distinct reasons for taking a trip, first and foremost is employment. Nowadays, it is a trend to go for work in other places. In their local area, they do not find a job. Due to the unemployment, multitudes are in hunger of work either it is far from their living area, or any other city. Secondly, people have their hectic schedules and they do not give their time to their families. In the consequence, to spend quality time with family and friends as well as to resuscitate their minds, they go for vocational tour to other town or country. Thirdly, a number of people who are historians travel for their findings towards different historical places. On the other hand, travellers have attained plethora of benefits. The visitors get knowledge about various places. They explore a number of traditions and cultures. They get to know not only about their food specialities, but also about their clothings. Apart from this, students who are going for their educational tour enhance their knowledge towards history. When they visit museums they borden their horizon while seeing old monument and getting knowledge about old life style. Moreover, travelling gives number of skills also. For instance, people have to interact with other people and use their language to get the information. It polish their communication skill. To conclude, going on a trip while work has become a trend. Although there are multifarious reasons for traveling from one place to another, yet people learn numerous things while visiting different areas.
Travelling is a trending hobby of the new
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fangled
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people
in this modern scenario, where it
is reckoned
that multitudes are travelling more than the
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past time
. There are plethora of reasons
as well
as numerous advantages
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that traveller have
from their voyage.

Why
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people
travelled from one
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place
to another? The dwellers have various distinct reasons for taking a trip,
first
and foremost is employment. Nowadays, it is a trend to go for work in
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other
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places
. In their local area, they do not find a job. Due to the unemployment, multitudes are in hunger of work either it is far from their living area, or any
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other
city.
Secondly
,
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people
have their hectic
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schedules and
they do not give their time to their families. In the consequence, to spend quality time with family and friends
as well
as to resuscitate their minds, they go for vocational tour to
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other
town or country.
Thirdly
, a number of
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people
who are historians travel for their findings towards
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different
historical places.

On the
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other
hand,
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travellers
have attained plethora of benefits. The visitors
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get
knowledge about various
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places
. They explore a number of traditions and cultures. They
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get
to know not
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only
about their food specialities,
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but
also
about their
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clothings
. Apart from this, students who are going for their educational tour enhance their knowledge towards history. When they visit museums they
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borden
their horizon while seeing
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old
monument and getting knowledge about
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old
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life style
.
Moreover
, travelling gives number of
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skills
also
.
For instance
,
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people
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have to
interact with
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other
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people
and
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use
their language to
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get
the information. It
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polish
their communication
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skill
.

To conclude
, going on a trip while work has become a trend. Although there are multifarious reasons for traveling from one
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place
to another,
yet
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people
learn numerous things while visiting
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different
areas.
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IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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