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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there is more advantage to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v.2

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there is more advantage to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 2
It is important to consider the type of home when searching for a place to stay. Although some people want to stay in a house, others feel that staying in an apartment has more benefits. In my essay, I will discuss why there are more pros than cons in living in a house compared with an apartment. One of the most significant advantages of a house is its large size. This is because household properties can easily be arranged without having anxiety over space. For example, a family consisting of five children can easily move in with their properties into a three-bedroom house, and the kids will have adequate space to play around. However, larger homes, does have a drawback in terms of maintenance. To illustrate this point, tenants have to pay more for electricity, water and gas compare to when living in a suite. Furthermore, another benefit of this type of home is that you have access to privacy. The result of this is that you do not have to share facilities with any other person. One of the main benefits of apartment is that it is less expensive to maintain. As a result, much cheaper to live in. For instance, you pay less for gas, electricity, water and even rents when compared with residing in expansive houses. Nevertheless, this type of residence has its own disadvantages in lack of space and privacy. The reason for this is because families with large properties will not have enough area to keep them and their offspring will not have enough place to play around. Also you will have to share most of the facilities within the building such as kitchen, bathroom and dinning. In conclusion, despite the benefits of staying in a suite, this comes with a huge inconvenience; I believe that comparing this with the pros and cons of living in houses, the benefits outweighs that of an apartments.
It is
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important
to consider the type of home when searching for a place to stay. Although
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some
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people
want to stay in a
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house
, others feel that staying in an apartment has more
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benefits
. In my essay, I will discuss why there are more pros than cons in living in a
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house
compared with an apartment.

One of the most significant advantages of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
is its large size. This is
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because
household properties can
easily
be arranged
without having anxiety over space.
For example
, a family consisting of five children can
easily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
in with their properties into a three-bedroom
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house
, and the kids will have adequate space to play around.
However
, larger homes, does have a drawback in terms of maintenance. To illustrate this point, tenants
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have to
pay more for electricity, water and gas compare to when living in a suite.
Furthermore
, another
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benefit
of this type of home is that you have access to privacy. The result of this is that you do not
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have to
share facilities with any other person.

One of the main
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benefits
of apartment is that it is less expensive to maintain.
As a result
, much cheaper to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in.
For instance
, you pay less for gas, electricity, water and even rents when compared with residing in expansive
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houses
.
Nevertheless
, this type of residence has its
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own
disadvantages in lack of space and privacy.
The reason for this is
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because
families with large properties will not have
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enough
area to
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keep
them and their offspring will not have
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enough
place to play around.
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Also
you will
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have to
share most of the facilities within the building such as kitchen, bathroom and dinning.

In conclusion
, despite the
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benefits
of staying in a suite, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with a huge inconvenience; I believe that comparing this with the pros and cons of living in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
benefits
outweighs that of
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "an apartment" or simply "apartments"?
an apartments
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there is more advantage to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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