Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.6

It is a common suggestion that people should be consumed food and braveries with are prepared nearby places not to transport food from far away places from small farms as transportation create too much pollution. This essay will discuss the merits and demerits associated with this trend. There are numerous advantages for people should consume food which is produced in their home town. The most significant merit is local industries will be developed as the needs of humans. we will have more factories and farming sections will be developed in and every city. this will create a huge amount of employment. The best example is India during the conflict with China many new industries have been developed in an option of China's goods. Another noteworthy merit of this is transportation cost will be high so products cost will also be higher if is made is a small town. However, there supposedly are disadvantages too. The focal con for this is global warming will increase as many new factories will start so the not only pollution but also will affect the natural resources also. For instance, if an industry like lays will be there in all states, not one can imagine how much smoke will be released. In addition to this vegetation will be not farmed across the country The best example is apple it can't be grown in Rajasthan as it required a very low climate. To conclude, like a coin that has two sides, there clearly are both merits such as many new factories will be made and the product cost will be reduced and demerits like global warming and imbalances of food for people should be consumed which every thing are grown in their home town. The plusses associated with this trend need to be welcomed and cherished, while the minuses need to be carefully considered and dealt with.
It is a common suggestion that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
be consumed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
and
Possible spelling mistake found.
braveries
with
are prepared
nearby places not to transport
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
from far away places from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
farms as transportation create too much pollution. This essay will discuss the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
merits
and demerits associated with this trend.

There are numerous advantages for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should consume
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
which
is produced
in their
The word “hometown” is normally spelled as one word.
home town
. The most significant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
merit
is local industries will
be developed
as the needs of humans.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
we
will have more factories and farming sections will
be developed
in and every city.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
this
will create a huge amount of employment. The best example is India during the conflict with China
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
new industries have
been developed
in an option of China's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
. Another noteworthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
merit
of this is transportation cost will be high
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
products cost will
also
be higher if
is made
is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
town.

However
, there
supposedly
are disadvantages too. The focal con for this is global warming will increase as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
new factories will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
pollution
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
will affect the natural resources
also
.

For instance
, if an industry like lays will be there in all states, not one can imagine how much smoke will
be released
.
In addition
to this vegetation will be not farmed across the country The best example is apple it can't
be grown
in Rajasthan as it required a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
low climate.

To conclude
, like a coin that has two sides, there
clearly
are both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
merits
such as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
new factories will
be made
and the product cost will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
and demerits like global warming and imbalances of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
for

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
be consumed
which every thing
are grown
in their
The word “hometown” is normally spelled as one word.
home town
. The
Possible spelling mistake found.
plusses
associated with this trend need to
be welcomed
and cherished, while the minuses need to be
carefully
considered and dealt with.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad
Show Comments
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts