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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v.32

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 32
Nowadays, one of the interesting activities among people is travelling. This fact could be supported by the number of travellers that always increase every year. There are several reasons why people like to do long journeys and the advantages of by doing this. One of the most popular reasons is hobbies. The leisure time is very useful for the travellers. Some wonderful destinations are planned by them before going there. Furthermore, they will work seriously in their full-time job and the reasons are to get much more money and use it to have a holiday. The cheap air ticket, the convenience of travelling, technological advancement, exposure of global tourism etc. contribute to attracting more people to travel to various destinations than ever before. In addition, the number of travellers reached a peak, because nowadays there are some offers that come from travel agents, TV programs, or special big event to a winner who participates in their quiz. Because of that, the winners get a chance to have free travel. The cell phone, the internet and the facility to work virtually from any place let people get in touch with family and work while travelling and this is another reason for them to travel a lot. Travelling is considered to the most effective way of learning. Experience gathered first-hand travellers is considered more important than reading or learning in other ways. Travelling offers the chance to get acquainted with different cultures and traditions. This is also beneficial to learn about history and new experiences. Travelling is refreshing and eliminates the monotony or boredom of busy life. To sum up, personally, I am pretty sure that travelling is a very interesting activity and offers lots of benefits. A wonderful place can be visited by tourists and they can learn the advanced knowledge about different culture, habitual of other people in this world and that can be a  life-changing experience for many.
Nowadays, one of the interesting activities among
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is
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travelling
. This fact could
be supported
by the number of
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travellers
that always increase every year. There are several
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reasons
why
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people
like to do long journeys and the advantages of by doing this.

One of the most popular
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reasons
is hobbies. The leisure time is
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very
useful for the
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travellers
.
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Some
wonderful destinations
are planned
by them
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before
going there.
Furthermore
, they will work
seriously
in their full-time job and the
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reasons
are to
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get
much more money and
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use
it to have a holiday. The
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cheap
air ticket, the convenience of
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travelling
, technological advancement, exposure of global tourism etc. contribute to attracting more
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people
to
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travel
to various destinations than ever
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before
.

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, the number of
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travellers
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because
nowadays there are
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some
offers that
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come
from
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travel
agents, TV programs, or special
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big
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event
to a winner who participates in their quiz.
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of that, the winners
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get
a chance to have free
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travel
. The cell phone, the internet and the facility to work
virtually
from any place
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let
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people
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get
in touch with family and work while
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travelling
and this is another
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reason
for them to
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travel
a lot.

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is considered
to the most effective way of learning. Experience gathered
first
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travellers
is considered
more
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important
than reading or learning in other ways.
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offers the chance to
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get
acquainted with
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different
cultures and traditions. This is
also
beneficial to learn about history and new experiences.
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Travelling
is refreshing and eliminates the monotony or boredom of busy life.

To sum up,
personally
, I am pretty sure that
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travelling
is a
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very
interesting activity and offers lots of benefits. A wonderful place can
be visited
by
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tourists and
they can learn the advanced knowledge about
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different
culture, habitual of other
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people
in this world and that can be a
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life-changing experience for
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many
.
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IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 32

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
319 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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