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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v.27

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 27
The globalization and technology have made our life easier than ever before. In current life, more people wish to spend their free time travelling and spending times on vacations. However, I strongly agree with the idea that, nowadays people travel more compared to olden days because of more facilities, improved transportation facilities and other opportunities. To begin with, the reasons of travelling are mainly due to the availability and convenience of facilities. Booking online for the flight and train tickets makes people’s life easier. They can book their tickets staying at home. For instance, in old days people approached travel agencies to book their tickets. In the same way, due to the invention of air transportation and water transportation, it reduces the length and hours of journey. Again, due to the globalisation, people are free to mingle with other nationalities, such as people migrating to other countries for work and job opportunities. This leads people to travel. Moreover, people wish to spend their holidays by travelling to other countries or abroad. Furthermore, now students are going abroad for their education. When considering about the benefits of travelling, it is really limitless. First of all, people can learn about the culture and lifestyle of other nationalities. This helps us to make confident in dealing with people of other nationalities. This helps not only exporting things but also to get new cultures and believes. I believe that due to this English became an international language. Besides, people get more job opportunities in other countries and can find a suitable job for them. Again, travelling gives people relaxation and happiness to people who are having a stressful life. To sum up, considering all the reasons and benefits of travelling, nowadays people are more interested in travelling. Globalisation, new technology and inventions make everyone’s life easy and they can travel according to their wish and schedule.
The globalization and technology have made our
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, more
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people
wish to spend their free time
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travelling
and spending times on vacations.
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that, nowadays
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people
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travel
more compared to olden days
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because
of more facilities,
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improved
transportation facilities and
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other
opportunities.

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begin
with, the reasons of
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are
mainly
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due
to the availability and convenience of facilities. Booking online for the flight and train tickets
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makes
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people’s
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life
easier. They can book their tickets staying at home.
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, in
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old
days
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people
approached
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travel
agencies to book their tickets.
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,
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due
to the invention of air transportation and water transportation, it
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reduces
the length and hours of journey. Again,
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due
to the
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globalisation
,
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people
are free to mingle with
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other
nationalities, such as
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people
migrating to
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other
countries for work and job opportunities.
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leads
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people
to
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travel
.
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,
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people
wish to spend their holidays by
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to
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other
countries or abroad.
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,
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now
students are going abroad for their education.

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considering about the
benefits of
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travelling
, it is
really
limitless.
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First of all
,
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people
can learn about the culture and lifestyle of
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other
nationalities. This
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helps
us to
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make
confident in dealing with
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people
of
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other
nationalities. This
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not
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exporting things
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also
to
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get
new cultures and believes. I believe that
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due
to this English became an international language.
Besides
,
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people
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get
more job opportunities in
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other
countries and can find a suitable job for them. Again,
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travelling
gives
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people
relaxation and happiness to
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people
who are having a stressful life.

To sum up, considering all the reasons and benefits of
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travelling
, nowadays
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people
are more interested in
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travelling
.
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Globalisation
, new technology and inventions
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make
everyone’s
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life
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easy and
they can
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travel
according to their wish and schedule.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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