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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v.25

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 25
It is believed that the travelling rate of people today is higher than ever. The following essay will discuss some of the factors which affect the situation and several advantages of the activity for the traveller. There are various reasons why the travelling activities have increased significantly in the past recent years. Firstly, a lot of people travel intensively due to the existence of the low-cost airlines. It is a fact that budget airline companies such as Air Asia or Tiger Air are providing an affordable and economic ticket, therefore, people from a different range of income could purchase it. Secondly, many companies have increased their export and import activities due to the globalisation. As a result, their employees have to do excessive business trips to other regions or other continents. Thirdly, as business competition gets tougher each day, the stress level of the workers has risen. Consequently, the number of people who travel for leisure activities has grown rapidly in the past few years. It is undeniable that travelling activities bring a lot of benefits for the travellers themselves. As people travel to another country, they would have the chance to learn a new culture. For example, many westerners have visited China, since they were attracted to see the unique culture of the ancient China civilisation such as the Great Wall of China or the Terracotta Army. Travelling also helps people in releasing their stress. It is obvious that people who live in big cities are stressed with their tight schedule and by taking some trips to the countryside; it will help them in loosen the tense. In conclusion, it is true that travelling activities have increased rapidly in the past recent time, and people are travelling for various kinds of purposes. Some people are taking the trips for business activities, while others are for holiday. Travelling is also a positive activity since people could get a lot of benefits from doing the activity.
It
is believed
that the
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travelling
rate of
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people
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today
is higher than ever. The following essay will discuss
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some of the
factors which affect the situation and several advantages of the
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activity
for the
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traveller
.

There are various reasons why the
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travelling
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activities
have increased
significantly
in the past recent years.
Firstly
,
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a lot of
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people
travel
intensively
due to the existence of the low-cost airlines. It is a fact that budget airline
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companies
such as Air Asia or Tiger Air are providing an affordable and economic ticket,
therefore
,
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people
from a
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different
range of income could
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purchase
it.
Secondly
,
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many
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companies
have increased their export and import
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activities
due to the
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globalisation
.
As a result
, their employees
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have to
do excessive business trips to other regions or other continents.
Thirdly
, as business competition
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gets
tougher each day, the
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stress
level of the workers has risen.
Consequently
, the number of
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people
who travel for leisure
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activities
has grown
rapidly
in the past few years.

It is undeniable that
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travelling
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activities
bring
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a lot of
benefits for the
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travellers
themselves. As
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people
travel to another country, they would have the chance to learn a new culture.
For example
,
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many
westerners have visited China, since they
were attracted
to
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see
the unique culture of the ancient China
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civilisation
such as the Great Wall of China or the Terracotta Army.
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Travelling
also
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helps
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people
in releasing their
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stress
. It is obvious that
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people
who
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live
in
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big
cities are
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stressed
with their tight schedule and by taking
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some
trips to the countryside; it will
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help
them in loosen the tense.

In conclusion
, it is true that
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travelling
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activities
have increased
rapidly
in the past recent time, and
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people
are
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travelling
for various kinds of purposes.
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Some
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people
are taking the trips for business
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activities
, while others are for holiday.
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is
also
a
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positive
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activity
since
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people
could
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get
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a lot of
benefits from doing the
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activity
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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