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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.31

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v. 31
In recent years there have been many developments in the tourism industry. People often go travelling around the world very easily. Because of cheap flights and the Internet development. Some people are very curious about visiting a remote area such as Amazon. This essay will discuss both the advantages and the disadvantages of visiting those places. On the one hand, it is clear that there are some advantages of visiting remote area. One reason is that tourism brings new jobs to people who live in poor areas. There are limited opportunities for work. Because of this, some young people might have to leave their family to get a job themselves. Tourism will bring new jobs for them, which means they are able to spend time with their family and remain in their remote hometown. Another reason is that tourists are able to have new experiences that they will not get in their home area. There are a lot of natural states in remote areas, and they will be able to expand their inspiration and knowledge through this nature. On the other hand, the disadvantages of visiting remote areas should also be considered. Firstly, nature is often destroyed by tourism, in order to build accommodations, resort facilities and new roads. Secondly, if tourists are in dangerous situations such as natural disaster or fire, it is hard to get help quickly in those remote areas. Tourists will face danger and it might be at risk of losing their lives. In conclusion, it is true to say that visiting remote areas have both positive and negative points. In my opinion, we should carefully consider to analyse the environmental impact on the land and safety procedure policy of the tourism company before heading on an adventure.
In recent years there have been
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developments in the
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tourism
industry.

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People
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often
go travelling around the world
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very
easily
.
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of
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cheap
flights and the Internet development.
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Some
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people
are
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very
curious about visiting a
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remote
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area
such as Amazon.

This essay will discuss both the advantages and the disadvantages of visiting those places.

On the one hand, it is
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clear
that there are
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some
advantages of visiting
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remote
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area
. One reason is that
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tourism
brings
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new
jobs to
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people
who
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live
in poor
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areas
. There
are limited
opportunities for work.
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,
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some
young
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people
might
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have to
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leave
their family to
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get
a job themselves.
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Tourism
will bring
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new
jobs for them, which means they are able to spend time with their family and remain in their
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remote
hometown. Another reason is that tourists are able to have
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new
experiences that they will not
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get
in their home
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area
. There are
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a lot of
natural states in
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remote
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areas
, and they will be able to expand their inspiration and knowledge through this nature.

On the other hand
, the disadvantages of visiting
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remote
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areas
should
also
be considered
.
Firstly
, nature is
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often
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destroyed
by
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tourism
, in order to build accommodations, resort facilities and
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new
roads.

Secondly
, if tourists are in
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dangerous
situations such as natural disaster or fire, it is
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hard
to
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get
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help
quickly
in those
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remote
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areas
. Tourists will face
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danger
and it might be at
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risk
of losing their
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lives
.

In conclusion
, it is true to say that visiting
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remote
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areas
have both
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positive
and
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negative
points. In my opinion, we should
carefully
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consider to analyse
the environmental impact on the land and safety procedure policy of the
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tourism
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company
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before
heading on an adventure.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v. 31

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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