Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. 1

In the current epoch, immigration to the different countries for superior earning opportunities is surging. Many people, acquire the chances, have the notion of providing healthier lives for their kids, while a few masses have a sheer different mindset about the struggle which children have to face by displacement. I believe both have a valid justification for their statement, because new countries have ample openings, but the initial phases are arduous. Life in a new country is strenuous during the early years of landing especially for the young generation. They face difficulty in adapting the unknown culture and find hard to approach natives either due to hesitation or different living habits. For example, if a family from India moves to the United States of America for work, the kids feel isolated, as they do not have friends or any known faces around. Besides, this could lead them to loneliness or depression, that can not only suppress their brain, but this can also affect their learning abilities and creativity. However, these issues arising from immigration are concerned, can be prevented with a little added care of the vulnerable. Nevertheless, over the years, one gets used to living in the different surroundings and can start exploring the opportunities around. Juveniles receive exposure to multiple countries which contribute to their personal growth and enhances their maturity level. These qualities assist children later in their lives for instance, while working in a senior position, one can embrace the cultural diversity at the workplace and use one’s understanding in building a team spirit. Needless to say, all the available resources such as academic institutions, MNC’s and other top-notch infrastructure can be better utilized by the immigrants to progress and flourish in their lives. To conclude, relocating to another region to en-cash the worthier position raises two schools of thoughts. One side of thinkers claims that this opens up the plethora of troubles for kids like loneliness, depression and more, however, some embrace the opportunity. In my opinion, if the gullible is treated with extra pains at starting, healthier and finer lives can be pursued.

In the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :contemporarymodern
current
 epoch, immigration to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcontrastingdisparatedistinctdistinctivepeculiaroffbeat
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 for superior earning opportunities is surging. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
Many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
, acquire the chances, have the notion of providing healthier This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 for their kids, while a few masses have a sheer You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcontrastingdisparatedistinctdistinctivepeculiaroffbeat
different
 mindset about the struggle which children This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 face by displacement. I believe both have a valid justification for their statement, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 have ample openings, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the initial phases are arduous.

Life in a new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 is strenuous during the early years of landing especially
 for the young generation. They face difficulty in adapting the unknown culture and find This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 to approach natives either due to hesitation or You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcontrastingdisparatedistinctdistinctivepeculiaroffbeat
different
 living habits. For example
, if a family from India This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocates
moves
 to the United States of America for work, the kids feel isolated, as they do not have friends or any known faces around. Besides
, this could lead them to loneliness or depression, that can not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 suppress their brain, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 this can also
 affect their learning abilities and creativity. However
, these issues arising from immigration are concerned
, can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :precluded
prevented
 with a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 care of the vulnerable.

Nevertheless
, over the years, one This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquires
gets
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to living in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcontrastingdisparatedistinctdistinctivepeculiaroffbeat
different
 surroundings and can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 exploring the opportunities around. Juveniles receive exposure to multiple You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 which contribute to their personal growth and enhances their maturity level. These qualities assist children later in their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
for instance
, while working in a senior position, one can embrace the cultural diversity at the workplace and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 one’The verb 'understanding' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
s understanding
 in building a team spirit. Needless to say, all the available resources such as academic institutions, Possible spelling mistake found.MacMSCUNCCNCMBCMDC
MNC
’s and other top-notch infrastructure can be better utilized by the immigrants to progress and flourish in their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
.

To conclude
, relocating to another region to en-cash the worthier position raises two schools of thoughts. One side of thinkers claims that this opens up the plethora of troubles for kids like loneliness, depression and more, however
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 embrace the opportunity. In my opinion, if the gullible is treated
 with extra pains at starting, healthier and finer This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 can be pursued
. 