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today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or antarctica. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v.1

today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or antarctica. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 1
Many holiday makers explore places where the climate is far different from their homeland as part of their adventure. Although travellers struggle with environmental challenges while abroad, they will also gain significant life experiences. In my opinion, exploring different places are far better off despite the challenges that they will inevitably face. The greatest benefit of travelling to different places with harsh climate conditions is that travellers will have life experiences that will improve their ability to understand different cultures and to survive in such conditions that would have been otherwise impossible if they had only explored their own countries. Being in another country requires travellers to push themselves beyond the norm into unusually difficult experiences. For example, when I was in Sahara desert, I was continually pushed out of my comfort zone into psychological states that were unique and novel and that I had to adopt no matter what. These ultra-challenging experiences are paradoxically the main advantage of exploring places with different conditions. The main challenges that travellers will face while overseas is usually environmental challenges such as places with hot weather may make you dehydrated which in turn make you seriously ill. Places like Sahara desert where the climate is extremely hot are the main reason behind dehydration. For instance, while travelling in Sahara desert I was running out of water and there is no water widely. Travelling to places like Sahara desert or Antarctica has become incredibly common. While explorer will do doubt experience environmental challenges, it is in fact, these challenges that lead to the main advantages of travelling abroad which is cultural and survival growth. In my opinion, experiencing different climates are more advantageous than disadvantageous.
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holiday makers explore
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places
where the
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climate
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different
from their homeland as part of their adventure. Although
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travellers
struggle with environmental
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challenges
while abroad, they will
also
gain significant life
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experiences
. In my opinion, exploring
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different
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places
are far better off despite the
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challenges
that they will
inevitably
face.

The greatest benefit of travelling to
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different
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places
with harsh
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climate
conditions is that
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travellers
will have life
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experiences
that will
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improve
their ability to understand
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different
cultures and to survive in such conditions that would have been
otherwise
impossible if they had
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explored their
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countries. Being in another country requires
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travellers
to push themselves beyond the norm into
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difficult
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experiences
.
For example
, when I was in
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Sahara
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desert
, I was
continually
pushed out of my comfort zone into psychological states that were unique and novel and that I had to adopt no matter what. These ultra-challenging
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experiences
are
paradoxically
the
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advantage of exploring
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places
with
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different
conditions.

The
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main
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challenges
that
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travellers
will face while overseas is
usually
environmental
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challenges
such as
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places
with hot weather may
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make
you dehydrated which in turn
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you
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like
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Sahara
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where the
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climate
is
extremely
hot are the
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main
reason behind dehydration.
For instance
, while travelling in
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Sahara
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desert
I was running out of water and there is no water
widely
.

Travelling to
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places
like
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Sahara
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desert
or Antarctica has become
incredibly
common. While explorer will do doubt
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experience
environmental
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challenges
, it is in fact, these
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challenges
that lead to the
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main
advantages of travelling abroad which is cultural and survival growth. In my opinion, experiencing
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different
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climates
are more advantageous than disadvantageous.
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44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or antarctica. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
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