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Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think this is causing more good than harm for the home countries? v.5

Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think this is causing more good than harm for the home countries? v. 5
Students moving out of the shores of their native countries for studying purposes had been on the increase in recent times. In my opinion, I think this action poses more danger as its cause a decline in the educational sector as well as a huge economic loss to their home country. Firstly, educational tourism results in the neglect of the academic institution due to students immigrating for foreign studies, this will in turn reduce the total turn out of students in these schools. This could discourage funding from government and international donor agencies who are only motivated to support schools with the large student turnout. For instance, only universities with at least 10000 students are eligible for UNICEF annual grants. Furthermore, academic tourism could also result into the brain drain of the best students who most times prefers to stay back in the countries of studies for jobs and better opportunities. Another point to consider that academic tourism results in a drastic reduction in the economy of the departing countries, as millions of dollars are spent annually on tuition fees, accommodation and travel expenses by foreign students. This huge amount is significantly sufficient to upgrade and develop tertiary institutions in the home countries of these students. For example, the Nigerian Ministry of Education estimated that about 13 million dollars was spent on studying overseas in the last quarter of 2019, this huge amount if injected into the economy is not only enough to upgrade about 13 major Universities in Nigeria but will also create about 6000 direct and indirect employment. In conclusion, in as much as there are merits to studying overseas, I think the demerits such as higher institution abandonment and lose of valuable incomes to the home countries overshadows these advantages.
Students
moving out of the shores of their native
countries
for studying purposes had been on the increase in recent times. In my opinion, I
think
this action poses more
danger
as its cause a decline in the educational sector
as well
as a huge economic loss to their home country.

Firstly
, educational tourism results in the neglect of the academic institution due to
students
immigrating for foreign studies, this will in turn
reduce
the total turn out of
students
in these schools. This could discourage funding from
government
and international donor agencies who are
only
motivated to support schools with the large
student
turnout.
For instance
,
only
universities with at least 10000
students
are eligible for UNICEF annual grants.
Furthermore
, academic tourism could
also
result into the brain drain of the best
students
who most times prefers to stay back in the
countries
of studies for jobs and better opportunities.

Another point to consider that academic tourism results in a drastic reduction in the economy of the departing
countries
, as millions of dollars
are spent
annually
on tuition fees, accommodation and travel expenses by foreign
students
. This huge amount is
significantly
sufficient to upgrade and develop tertiary institutions in the home
countries
of these
students
.
For example
, the Nigerian Ministry of Education estimated that about 13 million dollars
was spent
on studying overseas in the last quarter of 2019, this huge amount if injected into the economy is not
only
enough
to upgrade about 13 major Universities in Nigeria
but
will
also
create about 6000 direct and indirect employment.

In conclusion
, in as much as there are merits to studying overseas, I
think
the demerits such as higher institution abandonment and lose of valuable incomes to the home
countries
overshadows these advantages.
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IELTS essay Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think this is causing more good than harm for the home countries? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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