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Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think the benefits of this outweighs the disadvantages? " v.4

Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think the benefits of this outweighs the disadvantages? " v. 4
University education is a unique experience for students. Some individuals prefer studying abroad. Others find it easier to stay in their country to study. In my opinion the benefits of studying on a foreign country outcome its negative impact. This easement will explain the positive impacts that I believe they overcome its disadvantages. The most significant influence of studying overseas are the personal growth. Students in this case not only gain knowledge but also develop skills in life. For example, they may enhance their time and financial managements, especially if they work to support themselves. Being abroad means that they have to be completely independent. Because they are a way from their families and friends, they may feel homesick and face some difficulty. However, this can be a chance to overcome one's fears, and it can encourage them to leave their comfort zone. Cultural and intellectual impacts can be increased when attending schools abroad. Most students, who travel to another country to study, learn a new language. A second language can help them to explore a new culture. For instance, individuals can meet people from around the worlds and be exposed to their backgrounds. Because of this, they can learn to accept and respect their differences. Moreover, this can teach them to think on a different level to express their thoughts and engage in discussion. Even though international students can involve in various activities that can be challenging, these experiences are essential to grow. To conclude, there are many choices of the location of schools that student can consider including leaving their home and attending institutions near their home. Despite the fact that studying abroad requires money and hard working, its effects are greater and worth it.
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students
.
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Some
individuals prefer
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studying
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abroad
. Others find it easier to stay in their country to study. In my opinion the benefits of
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studying
on a foreign country outcome its
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negative
impact. This easement will
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explain
the
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positive
impacts that I believe they overcome its disadvantages.

The most significant influence of
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studying
overseas are the personal growth.
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Students
in this case
not
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only
gain knowledge
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but
also
develop
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skills
in life.
For example
, they may enhance their time and financial managements,
especially
if they work to support themselves. Being
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abroad
means that they
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have to
be completely independent.
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Because
they are a way from their families and friends, they may feel homesick and face
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some
difficulty.
However
, this can be a chance to overcome one's fears, and it can encourage them to
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leave
their comfort zone.

Cultural and intellectual impacts can
be increased
when attending schools
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abroad
. Most
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students
, who travel to another country to study, learn a new language. A second language can
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help
them to explore a new culture.
For instance
, individuals can
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meet
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people
from around the worlds and
be exposed
to their backgrounds.
Because of this
, they can learn to accept and respect their differences.
Moreover
, this can teach them to
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think
on a
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different
level to express their thoughts and engage in discussion.
Even though
international
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students
can involve in various activities that can be challenging, these experiences are essential to grow.

To conclude
, there are
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many
choices of the location of schools that
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student
can consider including leaving their home and attending institutions near their home. Despite the fact that
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studying
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abroad
requires money and
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hard working
, its effects are greater and worth it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think the benefits of this outweighs the disadvantages? " v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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