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Tell a story about yourself. What animal, plant, or other nonhuman thing would yoube? Describe your abilities and traits. You may choose to speak about a person youknow well, instead of your self. v.3

Tell a story about yourself. What animal, plant, or other nonhuman thing would yoube? Describe your abilities and traits. You may choose to speak about a person youknow well, instead of your self. v. 3
Some people are able to manage time and achieve a good work to life balance however many find it difficult. These days the lifestyle of people is different from the 8 hour working cycles in the past. The main reason behind this is that workplaces have longer working hours, concurrently, the majority of the population consists of professionals who are working in specialised fields. While being a part of these industries, employees are in contact with clients due to which they are accountable. This culture causes companies to expect more out of employees within shorter working hours, moreover, due to high competition in the market employees are required to live up to higher expectations. For example, in consultancies, where, the client requirements keep changing. To meet with the changing needs, we are under pressure to meet deadlines in a shorter period, which would prevent loss due to extended schedules. Eventually, the outcome of this is longer working hours that disrupts work to life balance. Although, there are some people who are able to manage this situation by being more productive during normal working hours and maintaining a strict routine. Following the above argument, it is also important to find ways to tackle this problem. It is necessary that companies should have managers who are able to analyse the program at an early stage. Not only should a manager be able to identify program, but also the amount of resources required to complete a task. In addition to the above, it is also ideal that employees notify their management on personal requirements. For Instance, at my workplace, the management is unable to plan and cost an assignment correctly, because of which, they are short of funds and unable to hire the right number of workers. This leads to extended working hours and unsatisfied staff. To conclude, it is recommended that people and organisations take into account the needs of the company and integrate it with personal obligations, so as to achieve healthier lifestyles. Nevertheless, it is advisable to prioritise their time not only for work, but also for family and themselves.
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people
are
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able
to manage time and achieve a
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good
work to life balance
however
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many find
it difficult. These days the lifestyle of
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people
is
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different
from the 8
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hour
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working
cycles in the past.

The main reason behind this is that workplaces have longer
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working
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hours
,
concurrently
, the majority of the population consists of professionals who are
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working
in
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specialised
fields. While being a part of these industries,
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employees
are in contact with clients due to which they are accountable. This culture causes
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companies
to
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expect
more out of
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employees
within shorter
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working
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hours
,
moreover
, due to high competition in the market
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employees
are required
to
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live
up to higher expectations.
For example
, in consultancies, where, the client requirements
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keep
changing. To
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meet
with the changing needs, we are under pressure to
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meet
deadlines in a shorter period, which would
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prevent
loss due to extended schedules.
Eventually
, the outcome of this is longer
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working
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hours
that disrupts work to life balance. Although, there are
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some
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people
who are
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able
to manage this situation by being more productive during normal
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working
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hours
and maintaining a strict routine.

Following the above argument, it is
also
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important
to find ways to tackle this problem. It is necessary that
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companies
should have managers who are
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able
to
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analyse
the program at an early stage. Not
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only
should a manager be
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able
to identify program,
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but
also
the amount of resources required to complete a task.
In addition
to the above, it is
also
ideal that
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employees
notify their management on personal requirements.
For Instance
, at my workplace, the management is unable to plan and cost an assignment
correctly
,
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because
of which, they are short of funds and unable to hire the right number of workers. This leads to extended
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
and unsatisfied staff.

To conclude
, it
is recommended
that
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people
and
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organisations
take into account the needs of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and integrate it with personal obligations,
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
achieve healthier lifestyles.
Nevertheless
, it is advisable to
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prioritise
their time not
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only
for work,
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but
also
for family and themselves.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Tell a story about yourself. What animal, plant, or other nonhuman thing would yoube? Describe your abilities and traits. You may choose to speak about a person youknow well, instead of your self. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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