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Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. v. 3
An increasing number of people are using mobile phones and computers nowadays. It is agued that it leads to the losing the ability to communicate directly of users. I partly agree with this idea depending on how people use these technological devices in their life. On the one hand, when people access to the internet with smart phones or computers, they lose their face-to-face communication because of some main reasons. Firstly, people tend to spend too much time playing games, watching movies, reading a bunch of articles appeared in their feeds. . . without talking with their family or friends. As a result, they rarely talk to other people and then gradually lose the ability to communicate face to face. Secondly, the availability of new communication technologies can also have the result of isolating people and discouraging real interaction. For example, many youngsters choose to make friends online rather than hang out with their crew in real world, and these virtual relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships. On the other hand, interaction by cell phones and computers through application like video chat on social networks are almost as good as face-to-face meetings now. It allows people in different countries to interact without meeting each other and helps them keep in touch wherever they are. For example, a student can now take video lessons with a teacher in different city or country. In addition, now people can search for many interesting programs on the internet that teach them how to communicate well in real life. Therefore, people feel easily to assess a world of knowledge and experience in communication activities. Inconclusion, computers and cell phones may lead to losing communication skills when they have face to face meetings. However, the high-tech equipments also help to improve communication skills depend on how people use it in their daily life.
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are using mobile
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phones
and computers nowadays. It is
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agued
that it leads to the losing the ability to communicate
directly
of users. I partly
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agree
with this
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idea
depending on how
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people
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use
these technological devices in their life.

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people
access to the internet with smart
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phones
or computers, they lose their face-to-face
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communication
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because
of
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some
main reasons.
Firstly
,
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people
tend to spend too much time playing games, watching movies, reading a bunch of articles appeared in their feeds.
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without
talking with their family or friends.
As a result
, they rarely talk to other
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people
and then
gradually
lose the ability to communicate
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face
to
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face
.
Secondly
, the availability of new
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communication
technologies can
also
have the result of isolating
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people
and discouraging
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real
interaction.
For example
,
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many
youngsters choose to
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make
friends online
rather
than hang out with their crew in
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real
world, and these virtual relationships are a poor substitute for
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real
friendships.

On the other hand
, interaction by cell
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phones
and computers through application like video chat on social networks are almost as
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good
as face-to-face meetings
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now
. It
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allows
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people
in
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different
countries to interact without meeting each other and
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helps
them
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keep
in touch wherever they are.
For example
, a student can
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now
take video lessons with a teacher in
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different
city or country.
In addition
,
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now
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people
can search for
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many
interesting programs on the internet that teach them how to communicate well in
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real
life.
Therefore
,
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people
feel
easily
to assess a world of knowledge and experience in
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communication
activities.

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Inconclusion
, computers and cell
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phones
may lead to losing
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communication
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skills
when they have
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face
to
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face
meetings.
However
, the high-tech equipments
also
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help
to
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improve
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communication
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skills
depend on how
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people
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use
it in their daily life.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. v. 3

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  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6
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