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Today in many countries people can live and work anywhere they choose because of improved communication technology and transportation Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages v.2

Today in many countries people can live and work anywhere they choose because of improved communication technology and transportation Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages v. 2
The modern world full of innovative inventions has changed the way people live in comparison that in the past. Thanks to technology and transportation enhancement, it is free to choose places to live or work in a country. Along with some advantages this brings, there are also significant drawbacks. On the one hand, the modern technology allows employees to work remotely even from their home and stay connected to the company during and after working hours. If there are urgent announcements or important notices, the information will be widely disseminated to every individual. This consequently helps to boost the information processing within the company especially when multinational corporations need to address customers' requests quickly. Moreover, a lot of cost on fuel could be saved since workers use less transport to travel to work. Problems of traffic jam in most cities are more likely to be solved, possibly reducing the level of urban pollution. On the other hand, the increased mobility in the workplace does impose a number of constraints on both employees and their companies. From the perspective of the employees, the delineation between their work and personal activities is rather indistinguishable. In other words, housework and family time are among the reasons preventing employees from fully concentrating on their work. Regarding the businesses, this issue comes with different challenges in human resource management because the company finds it difficult to supervise their workers off company campus. For example, punctuation is a big matter when it comes to many people from different countries attending one conference. In conclusion, despite the benefits of modern technology and transportation allowing people to live and work anywhere, I strongly believe its negative side is more considerable.
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changed
the way
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people
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live
in comparison
that in the past. Thanks to technology and transportation enhancement, it is free to choose places to
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live
or
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work
in a country. Along with
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some
advantages this brings, there are
also
significant drawbacks.

On the one hand, the modern technology
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allows
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employees
to
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work
remotely
even from their home and stay connected to the
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company
during and after working hours. If there are urgent announcements or
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important
notices, the information will be
widely
disseminated to every individual. This
consequently
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helps
to boost the information processing within the
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company
especially
when multinational corporations need to address
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customers&
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quickly
.
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,
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a lot of
cost on fuel could
be saved
since workers
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use
less transport to travel to
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work
. Problems of traffic jam in most cities are more likely to
be solved
,
possibly
reducing the level of urban pollution.

On the other hand
, the increased mobility in the workplace does impose a number of constraints on both
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employees
and their
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companies
. From the perspective of the
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employees
, the delineation between their
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work
and personal activities is
rather
indistinguishable.
In other words
, housework and family time are among the reasons preventing
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employees
from
fully
concentrating on their
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work
. Regarding the businesses, this issue
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comes
with
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different
challenges in human resource management
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because
the
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company
finds it difficult to supervise their workers off
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company
campus.
For example
, punctuation is a
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big
matter when it
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comes
to
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many
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people
from
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different
countries attending one conference.

In conclusion
, despite the benefits of modern technology and transportation allowing
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people
to
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live
and
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work
anywhere, I
strongly
believe its
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negative
side is more considerable.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Today in many countries people can live and work anywhere they choose because of improved communication technology and transportation Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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