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Tobacco is an addictive substance, but people have been using it freely. Some people say tobacco products (such as cigarettes and smoking pipes) should be made illegal. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Tobacco is an addictive substance, but people have been using it freely. Some people say tobacco products (such as cigarettes and smoking pipes) should be made illegal. v. 1
It is believed that the people who try to find friends with all opinions fell better, however, in another belief that friends who think totally different is a good way of the friendship. I will briefly discuss both views by supporting disagreement is a good opportunity to be open-minded. Doubtless, some people prefer making friendship like as in the same mind. Thus, they can agree with 100 % percent in an argument. Although, these humans can not develop themselves in a restricting area. For example, according to a survey which was at a local university, illustrated the couple's who work in the same office their tolerate rate and happiness. It is clearly demonstrated these couples get unhappy and indulgent day by day, even if they're thoughtful is nearly same. That is to say, in the beginning same opinion calls a good choice for being friends, also marriage, after a little time it will be a disaster in their limited area. On the other hand, to choose buddy have different perspective is a gain for individuals. They can learn more thing from each other. To respect and to discuss rise viewpoint, and when the human in there can be more tolerant against other beliefs. A good quality discussion can open in a new window in order to comment developed world. For instance, some politicians meet after main job, even if they have a rather different argument. Besides, they talk about their opinion related to topics, so issues can figured out easily. In my opinion, having alternative opinions incredible serendipity. In conclusion, I restate, to choose the same kind of mind is a restring area, however being a different thoughtful friend is a serendipity in order to increase opinions. I strongly believe that open-minded people arise in these circumstances, and all societies need them.
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is believed
that the
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people
who try to find
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friends
with all
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opinions
fell better,
however
, in another belief that
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friends
who
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think
totally
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different
is a
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good
way of the friendship. I will
briefly
discuss both views by supporting disagreement is a
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good
opportunity to be open-minded.

Doubtless,
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some
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people
prefer making friendship like as in the same mind.
Thus
, they can
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agree
with 100 % percent in an argument.
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Although
, these humans can not develop themselves in a restricting area.
For example
, according to a survey which was at a local university, illustrated the couple's who work in the same office their tolerate rate and happiness. It is
clearly
demonstrated these couples
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get
unhappy and indulgent day by day, even if they're thoughtful is
nearly
same.
That is
to say, in the beginning same
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opinion
calls a
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good
choice for being
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friends
,
also
marriage, after a
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little
time it will be a disaster in their limited area.

On the other hand
, to choose buddy have
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different
perspective is a gain for individuals. They can learn more thing from each other. To respect and to discuss rise viewpoint, and when the human in there can be more tolerant against other beliefs. A
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good
quality discussion can open in a new window in order to comment developed world.
For instance
,
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some
politicians
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meet
after main job, even if they have a
rather
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different
argument.
Besides
, they talk about their
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opinion
related to topics,
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so
issues can figured out
easily
. In my
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opinion
, having alternative
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opinions
incredible serendipity.

In conclusion
, I restate, to choose the same kind of mind is
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a restring
area,
however
being a
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different
thoughtful
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friend
is a serendipity in order to increase
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opinions
. I
strongly
believe that open-minded
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people
arise in these circumstances, and all societies need them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Tobacco is an addictive substance, but people have been using it freely. Some people say tobacco products (such as cigarettes and smoking pipes) should be made illegal. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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