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To much money is being spent on reestablishing old buildings, it would be better to spent this money on building new buildings. do you agree or disagree v.1

To much money is being spent on reestablishing old buildings, it would be better to spent this money on building new buildings. v. 1
It has long been suspected that, it might be better to construct a modern building as opposed to recreating ancient building which require large quantity of sums. Although personally I can neither complete agree nor disagree with this statement because every coin has two sides. There are many entirely beneficial aspects of keeping or rebuilding historical buildings. First of all, it could once be a mecca for saving tradition that is the most valuable thing for every single region. Secondly and more importantly, unless we would not reestablish old constructions we are highly likely to impress foreigners due to the fact that, nowadays a lot of people aspire to travel an ancient provincial which is more fascinating rather than contemporary regions. In fact, out of this, governments will able to return their invested money in three or even fourth times higher in contrast to they did. As a consequence of this, countless of countries are making special an effort to reconstruct and save these magnificent old buildings. On the flip side, there are enough notions to support the idea that, create a new modern construction would be greater instead of reestablish ancient places. Moreover erecting contemporary buildings not only provide rustic to be more picturesque, but also can do megalopolis like America Great Britan and so on. For instance America is one of the most highly developed countries. To add to this, there posses quantity of modern buildings that inspire every person to immigrate itself. Furthermore, expensive new erections might be added to enter Most developed countries ranking's which would influence people to live in and work. As a result of this, some regions concentrate on making new buildings. The conclusion to be drawn that, every building has a significant impact on developing bucolic, either it would be historical or modern. I genuinely think that, governments and organizations should equally pay attention in both types of construction, on the one hand it could keep culture, on the other hand it would be become a more beautiful homey dubbed with old buildings.
It has long
been suspected
that, it might be better to construct a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
as opposed to recreating ancient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
which require large quantity of sums. Although
personally
I can neither complete
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
nor disagree with this statement
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because
every coin has two sides.

There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
entirely
beneficial aspects of keeping or rebuilding historical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it could once be a mecca for saving tradition
that is
the most valuable thing for every single region.
Secondly
and more
importantly
, unless we would not reestablish
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
constructions we are
highly
likely to impress foreigners due to the fact that, nowadays
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
aspire to travel an ancient provincial which is more fascinating
rather
than contemporary regions. In fact, out of this,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
will able to return their invested money in three or even fourth times higher
in contrast
to they did. As a consequence of this,
Do not use "of" after "countless". Did you mean "countless countries"?
countless of countries
are making special an effort to reconstruct and save these magnificent
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
buildings.

On the flip side, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
notions to support the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that, create a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
construction would be greater
instead
of reestablish ancient places.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Moreover
erecting contemporary
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buildings
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
provide rustic to be more picturesque,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
can do megalopolis like America Great
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Britan
and
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so
on.
For instance
America is one of the most
highly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developed countries
. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
to this, there posses quantity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
that inspire every person to immigrate itself.
Furthermore
, expensive new erections might be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to enter Most
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developed countries
ranking's which would influence
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in and work.
As a result
of this,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
regions concentrate on making new buildings.

The conclusion to
be drawn
that, every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
has a significant impact on developing bucolic, either it would be historical or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modern
. I
genuinely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
and organizations should
equally
pay attention in both types of construction, on the one hand it could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
culture,
on the other hand
it would
be become
a more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
homey dubbed with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay To much money is being spent on reestablishing old buildings, it would be better to spent this money on building new buildings. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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