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Some people believe that competitive sports both team and individual have no place in the school curriculum. How much do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people believe that competitive sports both team and individual have no place in the school curriculum. How much v. 1
In recent decades, global warming has been receiving a great deal of public attention due to its substantial impacts on human life. Although this idea of coexistence between climate change and humans appears plausible, we should find out other practical approaches to combat climate change instead of accepting it in the long run. There are a number of reasons why some inclines to the idea of coexisting with climate change. First, since the impacts of climate change is significant, we are not strong enough to resist the laws of nature. For example, Japan annually suffers from earthquakes, or some of the Asian coastal countries always annually worry about the typhoon shaped by their geographic locations, thus combating climate change is in vain. Second, by harnessing the proliferation of technology or erecting solid buildings, supporters suggest that living with clime change is straightforward. For example, cutting-edge technology has allowed people to minimize the most detrimental impacts of severe disasters, saving millions of lives. Nevertheless, there are a number of reasons why the coexistence can do more harm than good. First, since climate change is largely shaped by human activities rather than nature itself, humans should take responsibility for that. This means exhaust fumes from vehicles and gas emissions from factories contribute to leaving a sheer volume of carbon footprint in the air, which in turn intensifies global warming. In addition, if climate change is inevitably exacerbated, it causes more big losses. For example, humans will suffer more from severe storms, massive destructions, or even species extinction, which is irreversible, leaving humans at stake In conclusion, the hypothesis of living with climate change should be rejected. By actively combating natural disasters and making the environment friendlier, people can live sustainable in their own ecosystem.
In recent decades, global warming has been receiving a great deal of public attention due to its substantial impacts on
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human
life. Although this
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idea
of coexistence between
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climate
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change
and
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humans
appears plausible, we should find out other practical approaches to combat
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climate
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change
instead
of accepting it in the long run.

There are a number of reasons why
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some
inclines to the
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idea
of coexisting with
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climate
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change
.
First
, since the impacts of
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climate
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change
is significant, we are not strong
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enough
to resist the laws of nature.
For example
, Japan
annually
suffers from earthquakes, or
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some
of the Asian coastal countries always
annually
worry about the typhoon shaped by their geographic locations,
thus
combating
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climate
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change
is in vain. Second, by harnessing the proliferation of technology or erecting solid buildings, supporters suggest that living with clime
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change
is straightforward.
For example
, cutting-edge technology has
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allowed
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people
to minimize the most detrimental impacts of severe disasters, saving millions of
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lives
.

Nevertheless
, there are a number of reasons why the coexistence can do more harm than
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good
.
First
, since
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climate
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change
is
largely
shaped by
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human
activities
rather
than nature itself,
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humans
should take responsibility for that. This means exhaust fumes from vehicles and gas emissions from factories contribute to leaving a sheer volume of carbon footprint in the air, which in turn intensifies global warming.
In addition
, if
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climate
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change
is
inevitably
exacerbated, it causes more
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big
losses.
For example
,
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humans
will suffer more from severe storms, massive
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destructions
, or even species extinction, which is irreversible, leaving
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humans
at
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stake


In conclusion
, the hypothesis of living with
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climate
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change
should
be rejected
. By
actively
combating natural disasters and making the environment friendlier,
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people
can
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live
sustainable in their
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own
ecosystem.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that competitive sports both team and individual have no place in the school curriculum. How much v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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