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To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v.2

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v. 2
Plastic waste pollution has been an issue that we are trying to tackle since a decade now, yet we haven't reached a conclusive solution for the same. In my view the plastic shopping bags have done much more harm than help, considering today's situations around the globe. Plastic bags are difficult to recycle and degrade, making it a prime catalyst in land and sea pollution. We have seen so many examples where animals, not only on land, but also in the sea have been trapped, adversely affected and died, due to our plastic waste. Recent studies have shown that the effects of plastic pollution on the environment, in many cases will take years to reverse. Government authorities have taken various precautions in the past to reduce the effect, but the percentage by which it helps is way below the need. Although of its various cons, plastic bags make our day to day life very convenient and a proper self-awareness among individuals can alleviate the harm to a good extent. Recently a city India adopted a policy through which plastic bags are issued only in specific cases and generalized use of the same was completely discontinued, forcing the people to use bags made up of the materials for their day to day use. Such small changes, if implemented and adopted by the people can actually help us reduce the pollution made from plastic bags. In conclusion, I would like to say, the moment of small changes has passed and banning plastic considering the current plastic pollution level would be help us start a cycle, where we would look for alternatives for daily needs.
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,
yet
we haven't reached a conclusive solution for the same. In my view the
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plastic
shopping
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bags
have done much more harm than
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help
, considering
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today
's situations around the globe.

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bags
are difficult to recycle and degrade, making it a prime catalyst in land and sea
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pollution
. We have
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examples where animals, not
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on the environment, in
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cases will take years to reverse.
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the effect,
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is way below the need.

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extent. Recently a city India adopted a policy through which
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plastic
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are issued
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of the same was completely discontinued, forcing the
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us
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small
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level would be
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a cycle, where we would look for alternatives for daily needs.
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IELTS essay To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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